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Wild horses wild roses

 

Praying for a wild horse

Red blood roses 

taking over this girl's mind

 

living in a world so angry

leaving a blood red rose

no where to survive

 

praying with hands folded

no angels by her side

 

Please God send a wild horse

for this wild rose to ride.

 

higher higher higher

 

oblivion

 

no one tends the wild horse or

the wild rose so fragile.

 

from heaven

above

blood red rose petals

fall one by one.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Dedicated to Tonka Waika and Black Crow

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  • Saqib Zamir
    September 6
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    Nice

    Succinct and mysteriously scintillating.


  • parenchma
    September 6
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    Super.


  • deercatcher
    September 6

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    Wow. Deja blue! I wanted to tell you about a radio show I heard. It was a woman, who was made whole by a friendship with a horse and her husband buying a abandoned quarry and making it a ranch where abused horses met abused children. I was driving/crying my way to work... The place is Crystal Peak Ranch, you can google, and she had a book or two. Meeder her name I think. The ranch is right. I think they would love this poem. It captures the heart of every thing I heard.

  • SpyderEyes
    September 6

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    I love the rhyming of "above" and "one."
    I do agree with an earlier comment that it leaves a lot open to the imagination. The part that leaves me pondering is the end; no one looks after them and the petals fall from the sky? Did she find him and then grow old together? Or did she wilt away?


  • Haygood gold member
    September 5

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    It reads like a short story. A lot left to the imagination, to form pictures and develope the scene. I do like the rhyme in the middle;
    praying with hands folded
    no angels by her side
    Please God send a wild horse
    for this wild rose to ride.
    Almost makes me want to be the wild horse!
    Wonderful.

    Haygood


  • sheltered
    April 15

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    damn backgrounds...
    had to highlight
    so almost never read
    glad I did
    amazing
    never seen
    repetitiveness work this well before
    masterful

    peace


  • pain in colorado
    April 14

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    Wow

    living in a world so angry
    leaving a blood red rose
    no where to survive

    What truer words

  • Mercury Rising
    April 13
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    A very lovely and lyrical poem that was a pleasure to read. Keep up the wonderful works.


  • ea silver member
    April 12

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    This must surely be the prayer of many a young girl, one answered in dreams only for most - you are one of the lucky ones. This makes me think of the Carl Samdburg story, The Bluewind Boy and the White Horse Girl, which I bet you would enjoy.


  • Swan song gold member
    April 11

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    the figrative language is very well spun and a nice take on the prompt as we as clear longing If i Were the big man upstairs i would answer that prayer


  • Maxboy gold member
    April 8

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    A wonderful write girl, but a sad one for sure.

    Well Done....Best wishes in the contest


  • Mirthryl
    April 7

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    Well conveyed longing for escape from an angry world. My favorite lines, "Please God, send a wild horse for this wild rose to ride."
    I remember an old friend saying, "There's nothing better for the inside of a man than the outside of a horse!" There is a lovely sense of freedom, power and unity between human and horse expressed here.


  • Greenwolfe 1962
    April 6

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    Beautiful

    This is a most mature writing . The rhymed part was
    the best . Also , the next to last verse was excellant . There were no bad parts . That's why it was beautiful and mature . I would not change a thing . This poem needs no revision at all . Just
    plain beautiful .

    Greenwolfe 1962

  • Judith Chandler
    April 3

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    It reminds me so much of a song by Dolly Parton, Emmy Lou Harris and Linda Ronstead about wild flowers. It used to make me cry and I find your piece is also very powerful.

    Of course, it stands on its own. Enjoyed this write.


  • wildfiredreamer
    April 3

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    love it
    horses, roses, and getting away for everything
    yep I love it


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    March 30

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    Tears and chills

    Oh my dear - the title caught my eyes. What beautiful wording. I felt encouraged by this; that I am not alone fighting off the vultures. Oh, this wild rose with no place to plant my roots needs my wild horse to come and spirit me away. Breathtaking. You are magnificent Poet! I am so very proud of you, my beloved dear sister poet of my heart and soul. There are no words for how magnificent and moving I found this. You are dearly loved!


  • Maybe Anastasia
    March 30

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    This is really cool. A lot of emotion. I love the lines
    Please God send a wild horse

    for this wild rose to ride.
    they just made me think...
    My middle name is rose you that kind of added to it for me... great write


  • quantumsurveyor
    March 30

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    For this reader the mood created is heavily doom laden - in tensified by the background. One to consider and reread but not, perhaps, to enjoy.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    March 30
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    Rheea,

    Beautiful, just like the person who wrote it.
    Joe

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