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A star beyond my reach
Coming ever closer
Now within my grasp
Crushing hearts into pieces

As the days rain down on me
I feel ever closer
Falling deeper and deeper
Not seeing the light of reality

As news hits me like bricks
I'm made well aware
Feelings thought to be shallow
Are deeper than I conceived

You mean everything to me
And I mean little to you
Your absence ripping pieces of me apart
Left for me to pick up

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Not my fave, something i scribbled quickly.

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