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Soul to Soul

I need to hear you love me
I need to know you care
Just because my life is just so pointless
Whenever your not there.
Your voice keeps me going
Your praises keep me strong
And you know if I go a day without hearing you
Everything feels so wrong
You are the most important thing in my life
Baby, you know you are my soul.
And I know without a doubt
Even though the distance is great
And the trials are hard
If we stay strong and bold
Heart to heart
Soul to soul
Together we will grow old

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Hate-And-Pain
    March 29

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    Wow this one is amazing, I like it alot.
    As for revision the line "Everything feels really wrong" try changing "really" to "so", it feels like it flows better that way. Otherwise its perfect great job.


    • kacooper
      March 29
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      thank you for your comments ^_^ i really appreciate them