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Smile! This is a happy poem for you!

Panda panda
it echoes
through the corridors of exhaustion

your walls are made of gummi bears
satisfying to hug

shall we go dancing in the rain, my cabbage?
Are we still so simplistic?

let us have another honey-coated night of shenanegans
pounding pens into the walls
beneath haunted staircases

and if any fool forgets to love you,
we'll just run away together.

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  • Tehuni
    April 4

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    this reminds me of pearl, if you were trying to seduce her I think this would be the best way to win her heart


  • tears.of.silence
    March 29

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    lol this is cute. You did make me smile and I appreciate it. I find the words are thrown together to make a cute melody. Excellent work. kahy