my mirror is cracked
with imperfect images
of what used to be
Please tell me what you think
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Short and sweet and very meaningful. This little haiku is like a really big fortune in a very small cookie.
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You published this on the 29th of March which is my brother's birthday. Little did you know but you have written the perfect poem for him. Your talent is beautiful and surely a gift from God. Stephy x
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yes, the past is a harsh consultant indeed …
that’s why I like haiku so much, because it brings us back to the present moment, inviting us to see things as they are, here and now … and in contemplating simple scenes of nature or of our daily lifes, our mind becomes serene and peaceful …
thank you for sharing your profound reflections with us …
ps. I wonder if a clearer break between line 2 and 3 might make your senryu even more powerful ?
(usually, run-on-sentences are avoided in haiku)
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Nice Senryu!
Leaves much to the reader to fill in while describing nicely in the present in the first to lines with the aha moment being a puzzle. All the best in the Contest!
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So little words, yet you can interperet this in so many ways. I would personally take this in as the imperfect images of myself and what I "use" to be. Wonderful write!
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