There she goes.
Swallowed by insecurity.
Looking at mirrors wherever she goes.
The mirrors in her head.
The mirrors on the car reflection.
Expecting people to judge her.
Doesn't she know she's beautiful?
She's swallowed by insecurity.
Now her beauty doesn't show through.
Confidence can't even exist.
She's shallow and it's sad.
If only she would learn to love herself.
A contest entry
- How well do you know a person? by AllexisReed.
700 points, ended June 16, 15 entries
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Honorable mention
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This is beatiful. Good Luck in the contest.
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interesting it really discusses an important topic....
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interesting and deep
a very nice take i like it, will keep in mind for finals. very deep and honest.
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Perfect poem for such a self-centred contest, why should she care if we think we know her, she's probably just trolling for reads. I liked this. Good job.
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how sad that all too many of us feel this way continually. i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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i like this..some people really dont realize how beautiful they can be!
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Well, first I have to say it is a beautifully thought out poem. The words do convey what someone may think of themselves. I feel that it doesn't need the periods at the end of the sentence, but reading below I see you have already been told that so I will move on with my comments.
Thank you for entering my contest. I did say pre-writes were allowed if it fit the contest. If you read my page or any of my poetry, you will see that I am not insecure at all. In fact, I have overcome some very hard (life threatening) issues in my life, so I am sad to say that this poem does not reflect who I am. The title of the contest is how well do you know a person from their profile. So, either I don't allow people to know me by my profile, or you are not in tune with who I am.
None the less, it is a beautiful poem! And I applaud you for your efforts!
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Awwww isn't this poem the reflection of each of us deep inside? beautiful sweetie
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Awesome
love last line " If only she would learn to love herself" I have to admit I was like that before
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Amazing job.
I love this poem. It's very heartfelt. It is very honest, and it's touching. I love how you express your emotions. Nice write. Keep up the good work.
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Really great,
I've got an idea that your poem is a reflection of how you feel about yourself, if this is so, then from the way you write I would say that you have a terrific amount of confidence, but you hide it from others. I think the sentiments you incorperate within your poem shows great maturity for one so young. Well done and thank you for shareing.
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Your last line says it all, if only she would learn that, those awful insecurities would not have her so torn.
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this*
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this reminds me of a friend of minee
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I like this one to, keep up the good work ^^
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your poem is good but it will never be a contest winner for it relies on personal favorites good luck in writing
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I think the punctuation makes everything end too abruptly. It stops the flow. Very emotional...okay imagery. Good write.
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it took me 16 years to overcome my own insecurities, so i identify, technically speaking i liked the timing of the piece and the imagery was good
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ur emotions decribed in a nice effective manner...
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you asked me to come to take a look at your writes so here I am ~~~~ this poem is full of emotions, a touch of imagery, but the flow is rough, try leaving out the periods this ends the flow and makes the reader start over... work on the flow and listen to yourself and learn to love you first... nice title leave out the period and always cap the first in each word like this { Swallowed By Insecurity }
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