he felt torment until his death
it seemed like the only way out
dangling in his closet by a belt
leaving only fading memories in this world
he had few REAL friends making happy memories rare
the others treated him as an insect
as he strained to survive their daily torment
he went on to the eternal quest
he felt that theyre was no-exit exccept one
he took the permenant way out to escape the unforgiving torment leaving only lost memories on this earth
Author notes
no-exit
A contest entry
- IN THE SHADOWS by liquidmindforever.
400 points, ended April 14, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
who did you loose in your life by suicide?
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R.I.P Brandon =[
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RULES
Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my contest IN THE SHADOWS with your submission TORMENT.
Unfortunately, you have omitted to follow the
rules.
Please go back, if you choose to... and read the
section where word back is required in this contest. There were only 3 words from the bank
a simple request
Also, note that the words used were to be placed in the author's notes.
Regretfully, you have not followed those simple
rules.
Best wishes to you in the future.
Liquid -
It's a really nice piece that needs some work and can be even better with some punctuation and capitalization. Also when doing these contest you need to read the rules carefully and follow them. Keep the ink flowing and good luck! Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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Uhm.. this is a really good piece.. but you're missing any sort of puncuation, and capitilazion. Maybe it was done on purpose, but it makes it seem like one big run on sentence.
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Thank you for entering my contest IN THE SHADOws.
pLEASE go back and read the rules. You have omitted placing the word bank words into the author's notes.
I see that you have used them but the rules
ask that you place them into an's.
Thank you and best wishes,
liquid
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