Drained out of all what was left ,
crude and shallow land remained ,
hiding , in a deserted crest ,
yet the one to be blamed .
Aspirations , ambitions ,attributes
fallen at the feet of awakening ,
withheld passion closed inside the world ,
controlled the urge to retaliate , observed.
Brutally demoted to a position undeserved ,
ashes of the existing requiem , preserved ,
argumentation , a sudden forgotten nightmare ,
at a distance,watching with a cowardly scare.
Fragile dreams,abused and thunderous ,
obstructed from entering the universe ,
a mask developed , tainted , treacherous ,
hoping for publicity,none for the worse .
Author notes
Requiem of a Dream
by Kenny G
I chose a song
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A very good write overall. The flow was a bit odd with the long, drawn out sentences in each stanza. It might work better to break them down into smaller sentences, instead of making each stanza one whole sentence.
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I loved your language, writing style.. nothing wrong with this poem! Thanks for entering and good luck
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nice job. i like it.
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"ashes of the existing requiem , preserved , "
had to spotlight this line it was so well composed, made me think wow this poem is good!
ok descision time......
Yeeeeaaaaaassss! I think you could do well in my contest, on the grounds of originality,imagery and the pace of your work in tandem with style could proove to be interesting and refreshing. please do not let me down
see you in round two.
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Another Great Poem, But You Didn't Follow Tha Rules...What To Do...
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im so sorry judge
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..slipped me !
I have entered it in em ..the problem is ..I had enter it in any optional notes ..and not AN's .. ..sorry bout 'hat !
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Hehe, It's Ok. I Was Hoping You Would Be On To Catch That. Thank You For Changing It. Now What To Do...Your Poem Is Extremely Good, Who Will Win? Tough Decision. Good Luck.
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