Rushed and warned
Pitied and scorned
Feeling down and out
I took the wrong route
I didn't listen to the words
I ignored them like yesterday's curds
The butterflies all died
And to myself I lied
I set myself to my own fate
I didn't realize that it was too late
I married a man I didn't love
And my heart died like that of a caged dove
I experienced true turmoil
As I let my life rot and spoil
I was left with less than nothing
Because of a shiney white gold ring
Treated like dirt
Not what I was worth
Spoiled him rotten
To end up all but forgotten
Abandoned and left with shit
It was me he decided to hit!
Controlled beyond comprehension
Stuck like a teenager in detention
I've left that heartache behind
To see what new life I could find
He stepped in my door
And I nearly hit the floor
I opened my eyes
To all of the lies
The I held true to my heart
And now it's time to make a new start
My heart is no longer cold
I've gotten rid of the mold
My King has come to hold my hand
And welcomed me into his land
All the darkness of my night
Was washed away by his brilliant light
Now I know what I'm capable of
And that my dear is recieving your love
Never have I come so fast
To the conclusion that this has to last
I won't let go till I'm dead
Into this world I will again dare to tread
You are my soul mate
With you there's no debate
I will again say I do
I will again start anew
Do you think I made a good step out of my writers block? I haven't written anything in a long while.
Comments
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Ever so fortunate is the Phoenix, reborn to drift...well, anywhere free.
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I enjoyed the poem, although I agree that some of the rhymes sound forced and unnatural ("It was me he decided to hit," "Into this world I will again dare to tread"), but the sentiment and story are well conveyed. The rhythm jumps around a bit, but overall I enjoyed the read. (And where I come from, "route" and "out" rhyme perfectly.) May your life continue to shower you with inspiration, and your pen never run out of ink. Welcome back.
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I'm not really a fan of poems that rhyme, 'cause they can sound forced most of the time. I agree that it was a little rough in some places but I liked it. I actually had a little trouble with the first stanza ... I thought to myself, 'out' and 'route' don't rhyme! But that's because where I come from we say 'route' like root. lol. Thanks for sharing. I hope your writer's block is gone for good!
-jane
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Kind of rough in spots but good attempt. Love you.
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