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Alena

Tonight…I sit in this chamber, dimly lit by a lone candle
In its flickering light, my dead tormented eyes stare back
from the black, midnight pane of the window.

Stained dagger glints in dancing flame, drawing my eye, moving
sensuously, seductively, as if alive. Calling…a sultry, breathless
whisper, as if impatient to drink my lifeblood as it drank Alena’s.

Cuckold she named me…ridicule heaped on insult, each barb
scornfully driven deep, laughing at my angry, anguished tears,
until my blade, in rage, pierced her unfaithful heart.

Even now she mocks me, with staring eyes and rictus smile,
knowing me for a mad fool, who at a single act would destroy
his all in wrath.

She lay there; dark pool round her prostrate body, forming
undeserved angel wings, heartbreaker, whore’s daughter…
and yet…my love!

How may a man go on, when the very world, lay sundered upon
the floor before him? I see nothing beyond the horizon, save lonely
emptiness and despair each day I draw breath.

The long, slim blade comes to my hand, as to a lodestone, her
alluring song music to my ears, offering sweet surcease of pain,
self inflicted, if I but gave her…that which she desires.

One final kiss on cold dead lips, as I fall upon this sharp steel
and hasten to follow my only love into the void, and with a
last breath I call her name…Alena…


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murder/suicide

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  • Kathraina silver member
    July 21
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    Dark piece.
    Great flow and very vivid imagery throughout.
    Bravo


    ♥ Kate


  • Darkmoon
    April 27
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    pretty good. Keep it up and thanks for the entry. Good luck.

  • abmsem
    April 27
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    Lovely. Thank you


  • FallenGoddess
    April 20

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    "Calling...a sultry, breathless whisper, as if impatient to drink my lifeblood as it drank Alena’s."

    that bit gave me the chills!
    overall: very nice poem!!


  • emoempess
    April 19
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    love it..
    so dark poetry..
    long but overall amazing poem...


  • BrokenHeartsInVain
    April 8

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    WOW. Extremely powerful, vivid, and emotional. Your imagery was great, and love is a very hard thing to get through. Seldom that you hurt the other person, without hurting yourself along the way.
    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest! ♥


  • Blue30
    April 8

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    This was powerful and emotional. Your words flow smoothly and the imagry was vivid. Best of luck to you in the contests.


  • darkyinsoul
    April 7

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    Love is the hardest thing I have ever encountered. You did well decribing it here. Loved the flow and the words. Seems like the time for a new chapter of life to begin and that one to end. Excellent write.


  • awannabepoet
    April 7

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    Death for love unrelenquished

    How the pain that love does inflict is so near to the heart that it would obscure even the bravest of minds, let the hate you feel dissipate for if you are not at the top of your lovers list then perhaps it is a new world you must find and not some finite bloody end as this.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • SoundsOfSilence
    April 5

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    Christ...

    Jesus Christ...

    This is great! Really great!

    I am feeling this so much, the emotion is just perfect.


    I am speechless...


  • Night Terrors
    April 1

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    This was great it was so sad! I love the imagery you put into this. You did an excellent job. Thanks so much for entering

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