Bring your friends home father would say
we like to know who you hang out with.
Teenage years were painfull enough each day.
Male friends ran me home came in for coffee
Father would ask what are your prospects and pay?
acting like were going to get married,
Dad, I would plead he's only a friend I made today.
I was hoping things would last some time
It wasn't to be so with this father of mine.
I still suffer severe bum cring when it comes to mind,
I didn't do it to my children I tried to be kind.
A contest entry
- What is the worst thing parents can do to their children? by film.
500 points, ended April 11, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A good tale made me smile, don't know about you, but I'm not having anymore parents
Regards david
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In the third line, "painfull" should only have one L at the end.
I think that if you added some quotations around the dialogue, it could really give some structure to this piece. I really do like the length of it though, just long enough for a poem and short enough to stay interesting. Thanks for entering! -
perhaps add some stanza breaks? at line 3 for example.
I'd consider making this all present-tense.. just write as if it were then? aah but then the final ideas about not doing it to your children. though philosophically, i wonder if everyone's parents do different things that their children will still find annoying, we're just wired for it?
lovely subject and well written, thanks!
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