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Ring Master

                       I see you found a new pet to amuse you
                 Is this the part where I'm supposed to be jealous?
                  Or perhaps this is the part you tell me differently...


                 Apparently I forgot to let you in on this one...


            If you are a good master, you'll know she is just that.
                                             A pet.


         So when you are done playing with your pet, get back  on your  leash.

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  • Dulcima
    November 10
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    Nice twist.

    I'm sure that he's the perfect pet now.


  • carebear123
    August 9
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    omg i love this haha...so good lol..u make me feel powerful hehe


  • consternation imply
    July 28

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    PERFECT TWIST ENDING. I think there are just too many guys with pets. You gotta keep the dogs that like pets on a short leash. Great original creativity. I would never revise anything about this.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    July 21

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    I like this one! Well done and thanks
    a lot for sharing it with all of us here.
    Take care my friend!




    Jeremy0826


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 17

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    Good powerful writing here. I like the imagery within this piece. Keep writing.

    Dark Wishes
    Wayne Leon


  • tibsy25
    July 7
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    good fun

    Get back on your leash loved it well done

  • TheGiftofAnonymity
    June 20
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    eek!

    (runs away)


  • Junkyard
    June 8
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    wonderful write here..."get back on your leash"..loved it


  • Heath Thompson
    June 5

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    Made me laugh - even the spacing on the final five words works - I can see you ordering it! Another cracker!


  • RazorBladesRomance
    May 28

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    HAHA i keep my boyfriend on a short leash its fun to drag him around and its even funnier when he can't keep up=]
    Nice Poem!!!!
    i think someone wants to marry you. hehehe


  • awannabepoet
    May 26

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    The leash it came from a second hand pet supply store, for where would one get a leash that would be fitting of such a ferocious pet.

    It is sometimes true that the line is blured where one might even think hell yeah I can switch!

    I like it, I like it so!


  • Pid
    May 15
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    Marry me!

  • mcfreeman
    April 30
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    collared ....on a long leash


  • sinner-
    April 29
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    deliciously dark, aren't u the deviant one!


  • Heath Thompson
    April 23
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    Ohhh - I bet you eat men alive! Great title for the poem - you are like a caged tigress.


  • Night Terrors
    April 17

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    Hahaha hey that was great! I like the whole leading your lover on a leash thing. I think this was a very emotional write. I can understand the pain of a wayward lover. That must really suck. I am sorry you had to feel this pain.

    The Positives:

    This was a great poem full of emotion and I think some slight morbid humor. I really enjoyed reading this.

    The Negatives:

    Perhaps a bit too short for my tastes but that doesn't take away from your poem so I guess its all good.

    My Favorite part:

    If you are a good master, you'll know she is just that.
    A pet.


    So when you are done playing with your pet, get back on your leash.


    This part made me smirk a bit I couldn't help it.

    Overall:

    This was a very good poem I would give this a 6/10 overall. Thanks so much for entering I hope to see more from you in the future.


  • thisilove09
    April 16
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    nice writing, really good read


  • liltulip gold member
    April 15
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    wow

    a very good write!
    nicely done!


  • Fox.
    April 15
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    Serious?

    I need to come back to you, im overwhelmed!


  • individuality gold member
    April 14

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    freedom dances in another garden, it smiles, cocks its leg then goes home to its warm bed. a good poem.


  • Killerzombies
    April 14
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    Very strong voice, love the last line.


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    April 13
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    LOL, thats the way we roll. Hell yeah! Love it.


    • hisaddiction
      April 13
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      thank you my Lady!

      Your comments mean the world to me!

      Lots of love
      ~addiction


  • Daizee silver member
    April 13

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    Had to look and see if I'd commented on this already.. lol. Loving the 'wham! in your face..' feel to this.

    Stacy


  • log-home-guy-Nic
    April 13
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    well written

    very well penned. JK about ripping out the hearts. there is plenty of passion to love us all.


  • Happy3
    April 13
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    The last line is very fascinating indeed!


  • konrad
    April 12
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    shackels and chains

    good write ! filled with darkness and domination.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 6
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    well whos this to then ? you never cease to amaze.
    short and sweet and Brilliant like u r,

  • Judith Chandler
    March 31
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    A pet for the pet? That's intriguing. Sounds kind of decadent.


  • Poetic Rage
    March 31

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    It has a dark feeling to it that seems to come out of the page and hit you witha quick rush of air. Ring master has found a new pet sounds as if a relationship where the guy has found another and you stay strong and no emotions show cause that would make him happy!!!


    Great Write!!!


  • willdabeast
    March 30
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    write on!

    some how the mobius strip turned leashes seems like all types of frustrating!
    peace


  • white stone
    March 30
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    mmmm....leashes. Nice twist at the end.


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    March 30
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    who's taking who for a walk?


  • Love-EroticPoet
    March 29

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    Great amusing piece. Amusing with the last line. Strong you are, I love the whole thing.
    The background matches this write perfectly


  • Injury
    March 29

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    This one really makes you think. You're the master aren't ya?

  • J Macabre gold member
    March 29

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    The end was a twist.
    I thought it was about a master the whole time.
    This is pretty deep for an erotica piece i think.
    Great.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    March 29

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    BAM and there it is..

    Well done sexy.

    Love
    Mistress Passions

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