Point and laugh at those who aren't the same,
saving the world's normality is the overall aim.
Lock up the crazy and put out the poor,
the world just won't take this anymore.
Those who are outcasts are sent farther away,
people don't like the image they display.
Slackers are punished; over-achievers are too,
it looks like average is all you're allowed to do.
Creativity is banned; it leads to originality,
people just can't take that kind of abnormality.
Everyone is different, no one is the same,
that's why we're all given a different name.
Afraid to show differences no matter how small,
we put others down first to cushion our own fall.
Point and laugh at those who aren't the same,
but no one is normal; no matter what they claim.
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Nice,.
This is sad but so true.
I don't know what has gotten into people.
Thanks for entering.
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i like this poem, its very true. the rhyming bugged me but thats a personal problem lol. thank you so much for entering and for following my rules!!! i've had so many good poems i had to sadly DQ but not you. keep writing, poet!
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I like the message to this, but I really think you should try it in freeverse. You seem to be trying too hard to rhyme in this and your meter got off a lot. Thank you for entering my contest.
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That's right ...none perfect either, well written awareness. Blessings.
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A Great poem indeeed! goood job! thnx for entering -
That is very true no no one is the same. One of my favorite saying is:
You laugh, because I am diffrent. I laugh, because your all the same.
I think being diffrent is wonderful, but you are write people as a whole don't see it that way.
The Positives:
Very insperational. You have a great moral here. I really loved this.
The Negatives:
Some forced ryhming in places, but nothing major. I really liked it.
My Favorite Part:
Afraid to show any differences no matter how small,
we put others down first to cushion our own fall.
Point and laugh at those who aren't the same,
but no one is normal; no matter what they claim.
This here was great I really Loved it You wrote this part particularly well.
Overall:
Very nicely done over all I would give this a 6/10. You did a wonderful job. I am so glad you entered. I hope to see you in my future contests.
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nicely done. The title brougth me to a conclusion that this was going to be a discrimination poem and I was correct. Excellent work indeed! I loved the way it flowed. You have 3 poems in the contest so the points will be divided. This poem gets a 32. Excellent work. kahy
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Very nice comment on the way people are condemned for their differences.
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A thousand applauds:
Thank you for sharing these beautiuful thoughts with us. This is somewhat very true. I love how you didn't hold back. You told us the truth about how you felt. It was amazing. It should be published. I especially loved the ending. Very good job. I really loved the title. It was very different and effective. It went well with the opening lines.
I applaud this.
I'm a Huge Fan our Yours.
Great Job.
Evemauy
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Wow, I liked it a lot.
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I definitely agree with this-- the world has become increasingly concerned with making everyone "cookie cutter", cut from exactly the same shape, ridiculing those who don't fit the mold... but the concept of normal is very hard to even find.
thank you for entering,
-cassidy
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