Tugging pleasurably into my restraints;
the dangerous heat of wax,
erotically burning my sensitive nipples
the feeling, throbbing throughout my entire body.
A soft sigh escapes my plump ruby lips as the wax cools,
leaving a delicious tingle, making me yearn for more.
I cinch on my chains hard, a gasp jumping out of me
as the burning heat sears down the center of my chest
all the way down my curved body.
His rough, enticing hands, spreading the wax
as he bites into my neck
making me moan loudly and jerk wildly.
My whole body throbs with unreleased passion,
and I beg; I plead for him to take me,
to take me higher into euphoria, to ease this building pressure.
He simply laughs, all so menacingly and yet so sexually,
sending tingles through my body
with a dark promise in his eyes.
With a grin he lifts the candle and slowly drips the wax again
along my inner thighs and I hiss in pleasure and pain.
Trailing his lips down my throat slowly,
he pours the wax over my labia.
I jerk my legs, the chains holding me in place,
he leans away from me and with his other hand
opens my most treasured prize and with a grin,
and ever so slowly, let the wax drip onto my sensitive bud.
The burn ignites ripples of ecstasy to be released with each drop.
Slowly one by one I am sent into a flood of pleasure and pain,
left shaking and quivering releasing a flow of enjoyment.
During this I hear his hypnotic promise,
"I assure you my love, this is just the beginning"
A contest entry
- Create Desire (20th Contest) by Trixie08.
1000 points, ended June 10, 34 entries
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First bondage poem so far. This really made my day! Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
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aww i thought u liked it lol
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^_^ 5 star poem!!! kudo's -
Rather eloquent ... lol!
Wax play could also be viewed from the distance it is taken from the body ... the closer the hotter and the different colours also burn to a different degree (coloured candles burn hotter)
The sensation of the removal of the wax is ... well, it rocks!
anyway, back to your write ... I am not quite sure whether you are a submissive or a Dom/me but suffice to say that you played around the edges of the ecstasy that could be got out of this sort of play without actually delving in there and having a go.
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Hello Loveaswellashate
You got one of my favourite fetishes to write, so I had high expectations when coming to read your write. I wasn;t disappointed. A seriously hot write that teases the endophines.
A couple of things you could have taken advantage of with this write - wax as it cools on the skin tightens into a pinch keeping the torment going. Secondly following on from that there is a blood rush when the wax is cracked or removed from the skin which is also quite sensational.
All in all an excellent piece. Well done
Your score has been sent to the challenge host
Jem
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thank you for the tips, ive never myself experienced hot wax so i was sorta doing this blindly and thats why i didnt go to long or too in depth cause i really didnt know the feeling or what actually happened.. but im glad you enjoyed it ^_^
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Excellent piece here. You really had the emotion of the pain from the wax here.
I think that this line;
"Slowly one by one I am sent into a flood of pleasure and pain and left shaking and"
could have been broken up a bit as it seemed to be a bit long while reading this, perhaps a comma to seperate it midway, something like this.
Slowly, one by one,
I am sent into a flood of pleasure and pain.
Left shaking and
Just a thought as to how that could have been presented.
Overall, excellent piece. Definately a great read.
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i edited it, tell me if that makes more sense.. cause i see what you were talking about and i didnt really know how i should have fixed it
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*whimper* i hope those were warm-up candles he was using!
That aside, lol. That was a very hot piece! You ended up with one of my favorite things, so i'm jealous, haha. Wonderful work!! ^_^ -
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thank you very much for your comment ^_^ it was a VERY hard piece to write
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