The faith staircase
Leading to the unknown
I walk and walk to the twelve steps
Every step wondering what is at the end
One. Wonder rests at step one, wondering of the unknown.
Two. Anticipation guards the second step, ready for the final step.
Three. Remembrance is on the third step, reviewing the past.
Fourth. Reflection lies on the fourth, reflection of all the good times.
Fifth. Regret is contained on the fifth, regretting all the bad times.
Sixth. Fear stays on the sixth step, fearing the unknown.
Seventh. Hope resides on the seventh, hope of salvation.
Eighth. Depression covers the eighth, leaving the world and loved ones behind.
Ninth. Acceptance sits atop the ninth step, accepting the end is here.
Tenth. Pain waits at the tenth step, pain inflicted equal to the pain to others in life.
Eleventh. Knowledge stands on the eleventh step, the knowledge of life is revealed.
Twelfth. Judgment lands on the twelfth step, life is judged and fate is decided.
I take the last step and end my journey of the Staircase of the Unknown, the end is nothing!
A contest entry
- a staircase... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended March 29, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is full of fresh ideas. I like this. Step ten sounds like the 'life review' that some suggest we may have to go through. We can not judge things while here on our earthly trip, but afterward we are shown that our actions based on faulty judgments of inequality were harmful.
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Humm..wonderfully sketched prompt..bringing the depth and the philosophy of the life through the words..love it..and thanks for sharing..
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Very interesting idea, and I like the visual here; the lines of each step seem to get longer as the poem progresses. I would suggest adding dashes or something to separate thoughts in some of the lines (i.e. "One. Wonder rests at step one—wondering of the unknown"). Also, the last line might be more effective if it was separated into two lines (break between "Unknown" and "and," maybe). Just my opinion, though!
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Wows . Lots of steps! I like how you described them all =].
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