The mighty Oak, so full of fears
when Autumn’s chill, fills the air.
Forest fauna, falls down like tears
oak leaves refuse, to fall in despair.
In Jersey Pines, Oaks stand alone
to lament, summers pastel bloom
As leaves rattle, to chill the bone
jaded Pine, a sentinal of tomb.
Winter passes, as each leaf clings
dangling skeleton’s adorn the Oak.
Only letting go when Robin sings
and spring bud's begin to poke.
So sad of all the forest the trees
mighty Oak should show such fear.
In winter breeze, still holding leaves
it’s vailed strenght, only thin veneer.
Author notes
http://papatheo.deviantart.com/art/Frosty-Oaks-104329228
Contest B-WOW # 1
In a list
A contest entry
- B-WOW By islekine, aboomer, and Starz of Heaven by islekine.
700 points, ended April 1, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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oh yes, this is the way,wintry seasons treat our treats, very nice imingery here, thank you for sharing, congrats on your Bronze...M
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I know, I feel the same way about the trees here in the long, cold winters, wondering they will survive through winter's harshness.. This is beautiful and with great imagery.. Thank you so much..
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Beautiful imagery...
Well deserved trophy. I really enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing
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Hmm very interesting. I liked the poem the rhyme felt just a little forced. You've entered 16 poems into the contest!! Each poem is roughly about 6 points a piece.. So your wow factor for this poem is a bout a 4. So each poem will be divided as equal as possible. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy
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Congrats on the bronze. Very well written and full of natural beauty.
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Congratulations on the bronze. A great piece. Well done.
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This poem really fits the picture. Very nice job!
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This is a lovely piece that you have penned now that spring is here I do not mind reading about winter thank you for coming out in support of our contest be well.
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I really enjoyed this. Reading along without counting I thought it was a sonnet is the word in L8 tomb? I'm not familiar with toomb ... and my spell check keeps underlining it. ?
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This goes wonderful with that picture! Great wording and depth in this. Your spelling is a bit different than mine - but I know that other areas spell differently....lol....and it didn't affect the lovely feel of this.
Nicely done!
Thanks so much for supporting our contest! Hoping to see you return again and again! Best wishes.
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Aloha Bill!
This is a truly magnificent write! You have captured
the essence of the picture...and gone much deeper!
Beautifully done!
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on!
and
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This was a wonderful and great write my friend. The imagery and rhyme were very well done. I wish the best of luck to you in this contest, take care and be well
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Hi Bill -
Check your words, *strength* * *budd*....and spaces here after *of*..>> sentinal of toomb.
....other than that....you are a Master at rhyme and telling stories which make people *sigh* ....truly a wonderful write here....good luck,
Bear -
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