Can't remember when last I saw desire
Been avoiding that passions fire
This really just ain't my style
Only wantin to pretend for a...while
Kinda feelin like the fool here
Treadin on unfamilar ground
Can't we please skip all the foreplay
Before I just turn around
Please stop the seductive whispers
It's not what I'm askin for
No need to lie to me
Cuz I ain't lisnen anymore
I didn't come here for the conversation
Can't spend for forever in your arms
Just one night of inspiration
So please don't work so hard
Lookin at the ring around my finger
Yer wonderin what the hell I'm doin here
Don't ask me to confess these bold intentions
I think I've made em pretty clear
Quit the meaningless chatter
So we can finish what I started
I got about another hour
Before I'm back to broken hearted.
Can't remember when last I saw desire
Been avoiding that passions fire
This really just ain't my style
Only wantin to pretend for a...while
Author notes
Just to clarify the meaning behind the stanza regarding the ring around my finger.
This is not about cheating on a spouse but rather about being hurt and that all of us need that kind of connection.
Comments
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you do have a way with words,sometimes we need the tempt of desire,this is another beautiful write,i am looking forward to so much more
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Awe thank you, you are a great commenter! LOL
Great for the ego
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what lovely lines! this has such a good flow to it..and I do like good rhyming ^_^ wonderful write ...love this one very much!
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Great Write!
The bold feelings that come with fear of losing again and again. After so much we do tend to just expect it. Great write!
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favorite lines :
"Lookin at the ring around my finger
Yer wonderin what the hell I'm doin here
Don't ask me to confess these bold intentions
I think I've made em pretty clear
Quit the meaningless chatter
So we can finish what I started
I got about another hour
Before I'm back to broken hearted.
Can't remember when last I saw desire
Been avoiding that passions fire
This really just ain't my style
Only wantin to pretend for a...while
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i was gone say not marriage but more of a promise ring because you say 'before im back to broken hearted.' that made me think of a promise ring. nonetheless this is an excellent poem that brings forth so much truth and realities to the fore. again this is good
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Wonderful Poem
A very heartfelt poem you have written. Love the rhyming too.
A pleasure to read this evening. Take care, Sandy 
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Interesting work here
This has a lot of depth and so many in real life have found themselves in such a cituation just to feel alive for the moment .Good work here
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Thank you
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Oooh wonderfully crafted!
Liked your choice of words
and neat ideas!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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I love it.
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ah i love this.
favorite stanza:
Please stop the seductive whispers
It's not what I'm askin for
No need to lie to me
Cuz I ain't listenin anymore
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Glad you like it, that particular stanza is the one I like best too.
Thanx for the comment, I'll be by to read some of your poetry soon.
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Sounds to me like a beat poem.
Was that your intention or not maybe I will never know, but there was definitely some very cool rhythyms going on there. I absolutely adored it. Full marks from me, Jimmy.
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While writing this I was leaning toward a song, something in the middle of blues and country.
Thank you for your comment as well as your compliment!
I think I'll work on it some more...
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i like this. it seems almost lyrical, but it's a little to short i think.. there's are sharp sense of impatience about it. kind of put me on edge.
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I agree, I need to elaborate a bit more and great perception as far as the impatience, the emotion this came from caused me to hurry and get on paper so to say...
Thanx for your comment and honesty
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