A horrid figure is standing on my doorstep,
His mouth spouting freely dread plumes of rancid breath;
Such a noisome stench billows from his rotten maw
As his hate-filled eyes stare at me in the twilight.
I know from his dread expression that he has come,
Come to claim me and to drain my sad poor body
Of all its warm juices from every orifice;
And I know just what he intends before I die.
My soul screams in terror at what awaits me next:
I watch with clammy fear as he removes his cloak
Revealing his scaly nakedness before me
Including the largest cock in eternity.
The bleak evening's feeble rays reflect o'er his face,
As he tears off my pants and sodomises me,
With immensely fast and powerful buttock thrusts,
Before I have a chance to empty my bowels.
And after he has finished with my rear passage,
He sinks his yellow fangs into my trembling neck,
Sucking hard enough to empty veins and colon;
I plunge gravewards, fucked in every sense of the word.
In a list
A contest entry
- Vampire themed poetry. by Gothic Star.
400 points, ended March 31, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Satanic blood lust loves all perversions! Or would you disagree?
Comments
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Well done on bronze
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Horny
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I was directed to this piece of ordure by Edna who thought I might like it - she was wrong. As for satire I tremble at the idea - this might have been a better piece of rhubarb if it had rhymed. I can't work out whether to agree or disagree I am obviously much too old for these jollifications. I have no claps left but I would not have given you any anyway (LOL)
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I KNEW you'd like it!
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Hahahaha!!! terrorific!
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I have to agree. The sex in the poem wasn't necessary to fulfill the purpose. Im fact, I think it would have been much better without out, because it didn't tie in very well. The beginning, up until the uncalled for mention of his "largest cock in eternity", was EXCELLENT, and very bonechilling.
All in all, this was a mediocre write, though I think the idea in itself has potential if it were worded more fluently.
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"The largest cock in eternity" is surely quite terrifying? Worded more fluently than that? I would like to see YOu do it, dear.
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I agree 100%
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LTFOL!
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Trippppee.
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It is a shame that you ruined this with the sex angle as the rest of it was really well written and could have past as a good vampire poem.
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Thank you for your comment. I suppose the bowels bit is a bit sensual, but vampires are very sexy creatures. I know, since I am one.
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No it isnt that bit. The first half was brill but (I feel) the bit about the cock and the sex ruins it. Sensual would be ok if told better and the start of the poem shows that you could manage to do it better. If you would like to try it would stand a good chance in this
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What sex angle?????????????????
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I'm sorry, what sex angle? Did you not read it?
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All I read is the bullying of one poor species by another more supreme being; such is the way of the world is it not?
I am sure count orlok trembled with trepidation when composing this satirical piece of undiluted pleasure lest it not be good enough for his devout masters.
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It's not very sexy. Well, it's QUITE sexy...
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