Could be better, couldn't be worse.
I cry as I write this verse.
The best part is nothing else could go wrong.
The sad part is everything has already gone wrong.
Could be better, couldn't be worse.
I scream as I write another verse.
Everything fell apart.
My heart is split in two.
Is there anything I can do?
Could be better, couldn't be worse.
I bite my nails as I write another verse.
I'm nervous as hell.
I've come out of my shell.
Now I'm crying to the world.
Could be better, couldn't be worse.
I smile as I write my last verse.
Now everyone can sympathize.
Finally.
Pay attention to me.
Show empathy.
I need it.
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no, sorry. the way you have written this show a lot of powerful emotion, but it is also very cliche.
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oh wow... this is so full of emotion it's just amazing. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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thx for entering
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I'm very impressed. For someone at your age you write very well thought out and accessible poetry. Well done, I wish that I were as talented as you are when I was 14.
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Awwwww you have a funny way of looking at things
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I like the could be better could be worse, goes to show life can go either way. depends on how you look at it. like a full glass or half of glass
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I'm sorry, this contest was only for poems that were in part one of Give Me Anything. I'm going to have to remove it via the rules, nice poem though.
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Love it!
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This is a delight to recite. You did a great job entwining the rhyme and the epanaphora. Well done!
Love,
Amera
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This is really good! I can feel the emotion and nice job with the words. My favorite part was this-
Could be better, couldn't be worse.
I scream as I write another verse.
Everything fell apart.
My heart is split in two.
Is there anything I can do?
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i like the repetition, it doesn't always work for me, but you seem to understand the formula pretty well. good job, keep it up...
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great write, good job as using writing as an outlet and getting your thoughts out! wish I could do this more
keep penning
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Keep writing!
So honest. This is what poetry is about as far as I'm concerned! Just articulating those feelings onto paper/screen. I like your honesty that comes through, I hope things are getting better for you, or that they soon will. God bless you. -
WONDERFUL!!!
There are indeed times when one just has to let their heart open and bare all. What better way than to write their feelings down and express with words what is in the heart.
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Amazing! Absolutely great write! Great emotions and really well worded!!
(My sympathies for you! In times of great sorrow or depression all you need is a helping hand, a ray of hope and a feeling that as I am still alive I will see a better day tomorrow!)
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