life is a labyrinth,
& there are
no breadcrumbs-
just gasoline.
you & i?
a match
( made in heaven )
who birthed a blaze-
where smoke
smothered like
a wedding veil.
"follow me,"
[you said]
like lemmings
in sky-dive formation-
we clasped hands.
(we'll hold on,
like it will be okay.)
"we can't go back."
A contest entry
- on the brink by going nowhere.
700 points, ended March 29, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bronze I by Salty Hibiscus.
525 points, ended April 11, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I like your peom so I thought I'd put my comment in!=P
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Wow! This is really good! I'd love to just stand up and applaude but I don't think the computer cares. Oh well. I liked how you carried the same metaphor all through it and even had a match about the pun. That was great. It was very dramatic and kind of romantic in a way. I thought you did a good job with this.
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this had such a deep sadness to it. im not sure how i felt when i finished... not happy, not sad... sort of numb. i like what you did here. thank you for your entry.
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Wow,
Different but a very nice piece I liked it. Good luck in the contest
thanks for sharing and keep writing!
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