Killing the silence with
Your cheap mufflers and cellphones
Over the horizon
Tokyo drifts in my heart,
Ongoing and fond memories.
Take me there
Over the sea and to Japan
Keyhole to my heart
You will understand
Oh, how I love Japan.
Author notes
I LOVE JAPAN!!! (And Australia, Canada, Russia, China, America and....)
a piece by me, H E R O E S R O X
In a list
A contest entry
- Prewite Contest by T.o.r.t.u.r.e..
475 points, ended April 2, 94 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think of this?
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I would give you clappies for the brilliantness of this write but i cant.. im point stingy.. i dun have alot of points. But anyways this is a brilliant poem
Favorite lines:
"Take me there
Over the sea and to Japan
Keyhole to my heart
You will understand
Oh, how I love Japan."
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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Ah..this is a thought provoking journey of the subject..and its creation is though very happy with its end..love it..thanks..
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I love Japan too! But I don't like how Japan is repeated in the last bit... The title is great, so great, in fact, that I was maybe even a little disappointed because of the other places you could have taken this... so much more potential imagery...
"Killing the silence with
Your cheap mufflers and cellphones"
i like the feeling this imparts, though, quite a bit.
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I love this title, too....lol. I wish that I had done better with this piece, but I wanted to do an acrostics. lol. Thanks for your kind and honest review of it! Very much appreciated!
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acrostics are pretty hard to do, but they are so cool
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Oooh love this write! Makes me long for a trip to Japan ^.^
Wonderful piece, thanks for sharing!!!!
♥ Kate
[psst, first line "silnce" should be "silEnce"]
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