I remember
a little round-eyed
wonder,
looking for
acceptance
in a world
where oxygen
isn’t free.
- - I’ll hold
your hand
as you cross
the street.
Author notes
prompt: 'what you once were'
25 words.
--this is for my brother. too bad he doesn't need me anymore.
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A contest entry
- Quickie Now #24 by amaranthine lover.
700 points, ended April 18, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is so sad and very beautiful.
"looking for
acceptance
in a world
where oxygen
isn’t free."
amazingly worded -
in a world
where oxygen
isn’t free.
that's beautiful. i feel like you've written something like it before, or like there's a song lyric like it :S weird deja vu
anyways this is so pretty and emotional and i love it -
"in a world
where oxygen
isn’t free."
There are some powerful lines in this,
You've used the prompt given to you very well.
Hope you place!
Good luck,
Sophie.
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wow.
so beautiful, just full of love and adorable imagery.
I agree with Candy Morphine, it has a wonderful heart-stealing effect. :]
great job!
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this is just brilliant - so simple, yet so beautiful
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<3 thankss
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This is so excellent.
And your little brother does still need you,
You'll see gorgeous
ILYSFM
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looking for
acceptance
in a world
where oxygen
isn’t free.
--This is absolutly amazing. Honestly it is just breath-taking, i feel like you've stolen my heart.
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