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weighted words linger
impatient to be spoken
message unreceived


~

Author notes

long nights
allow me
to feel i'm falling
i am falling
the lights go out
let me feel i'm falling
i am falling
safely to
the ground
(long nights~eddie vedder~into the wild soundtrack)


feeling lonely all the time

a haiku

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  • Heroesrox silver member
    March 31

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    This really speaks loudly!!! I really like your piece.

    Oh, I also LOVE Eddie Vedder. Very talented guy. Thanks for sharing and best wishes to you!!! Keep up the rgeat job.


  • Yemassee gold member
    March 28

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    How unfortunate to take the time to say something and yet once it is said, it falls on deaf ears. Your 5/7/5 haiku says a lot in a small space.


  • Ethereal One gold member
    March 28

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    excellent!

    Great haiku!
    Your use of "weighted words" is very effective, and the last line finishes the haiku perfectly.

    Jeannette