Reveries of the fabulous kingdom of cotton candy dive
in the Pastel hue of blue and white peaks and revive
fantastic dreams, love and deliverance reign and thrive.
Breeze, blithe and cream castles are temptation alive.
Crimson sun rays raging in the celestial realm contrive,
hope imageries to hell they will drive.
A contest entry
- burning through the clouds by JinSays.
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Judge's Verdict.
I'm sorry to say I am DQing you because either you didn't read the rules, or you decided not to follow them. -
Awesome! Beautifully written. I love the subtle use of alliteration and the way you chose to do the rhyming. Very well done. Best wishes and thank you for entering.
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Imaginative
This is a very nice piece. Your words paint a lovely picture in the mind. Your rhyminng and flow work very well together. Niceley done and thank you for entering! -
I do like this poem. You've said a lot with only a few words, and the choices were lovely, and unique. I wish you the very best in this contest, and thank you for taking the time to enter.
Love,
jin
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Great word choice, good job
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Tell me the way to get there! When I was young before airliners were jets, we rode in planes at a much lower altitude. The first flight I was taken on was on in a sky filles with bright sun, clear blue skies, and cumulous clouds. Your poem reminded of my feelings of wonder as a child! Good luch in the contest!
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oh my dear, Thank you for checking it and reading
you know I used to think of it this way, yes in my childhood and still now, recapturing some of the innocence and lack of knowledge that makes childhood mostly enjoyable with these simple ideas and dreams. in fact, today when I was going to work, I was looking at the sky that was so cloudy and clouds looked really weird, as if it was a sea up there with lots of waves and.....we will never end
maybe soon if you like we can have a collab in this direction?
i would enjoy it recapturing some of the ideas and imaginations of childhood!
if you like the idea then why don't we do it
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away
with crimson on your lips and in our hearts as I ride your wacky wonderland
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thank you for commenting
it is a wacky wonderland, and how I have dreamed of it and wished it all were true!
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