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this night



this night
no moonlit dreams
shine through the darkness so
deeply holding tight its clenched fist
this night.


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  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    April 3

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    The strength of darkness,
    holding tight in control...
    a most visual concept...
    foreboding...


  • Mari Goes gold member
    March 29

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    Mayne was right, I do like your cinquain. Missed you missed your verses and am so happy you are back!!!!
    YOU!


  • pixiestix gold member
    March 28

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    Yem thought I would appreciate your written voice and he was right.

    I know the feeling well that you've captured so beautifully here. The moon is a muse for me and sometimes withholds her light for reasons I don't always see...at least immediately. Sometimes the night seems endless without the moon beams.


  • Yemassee gold member
    March 28

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    Mariza will like this poem...the tone is like some of her writing when she's in a pensive mood.

    It's beautiful Mi, sad but beautiful. The moonlight clenching onto its dreams, keeping them away from us. And it's all too true sometimes.

    You said you were having trouble writing but this is exceptional.