What moves on?
What doesn't move on?
We'll all whither and die away.
We're never here to stay.
There is no exception.
The trees, bees, air, care.
One day it'll be dead.
So I say, why is it worth loving?
If it's going to be gone?
Author notes
Lol, I thought it was "so good" when I wrote it.
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I see your point. I have this saying of WE all live too die. Good write.
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An honest look at life. I think life is just an adventure that the soul takes, that's all, just a trip.
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Very good write with the type of questions we all ask at some point or other.
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Wow, I really liked this. What great questions in this. Most likely to never be answered either. But the emotions in this is great. Not a very hopeful piece, rather a down and out piece. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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last question what is it worth loving if it is going to be gone?
do you mean Why is it worth living?
or What is worth loving?
other than that
a powerful write. well done.
remember imagery is key.
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Things are always are moving. Whether or not we think they are stopped...the particles in things are still moving. Even when things are 'dead' they're still alive...decomposition and stuff...but this is nice...it made me think. Obviously ha ha.
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Hello, again Taco...
Life moves on.
It has a beginning
but it has an ending, too.
But LOVE never ends...
it lives forever.
Another masterpiece for you, kiddo!
summer51
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It is a great work. it is natural and talks about the fact of life.
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Eternity is just too long!
What makes life great and exciting is the fact that it will end!
A lovely amazing and precise poem!!!!!!
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believe it or not this a pretty good write ... not many your age step outside themselves and contemplate the pure reality of existence, or if there is one ...
i like this ... once you learn to completely release yourself i think you'll be a pretty good writer
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The Experience of Love
The lessons of Love
I believe we are here to learn.
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Sad read but sometimes it does feel that way. I guess that is why I try so hard to live in the moment and not worry about tomorrow's or yesterday's. This is a strong wirte and to the point. nicely done for the subject.
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All the more reason to grab on to joy, excitement, fun, love.... etc., etc., because nothing stays the same, nothing lasts for ever, just have to appreciate what we have when we have it, see it, taste it, own it, love it! This is clearly written, conveys the emotion very well, ends with an explicit and thought-provoking question. Well-done!
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How sad. I have felt this way before. Life is hard...but it is what you make it. Wishing you better days.
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Wow very sad.Hope you feel better soon.Iv'e been there.
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Life is ephemeral. And this piece reaffirms that statement. This is a depressing piece, although I believe that's how it was intended. Well done
Although I hope you eventually improve your outlook in life once beautiful things enter it. You never know, sometimes it's just beside us
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