Shivering helplessly,
this chilly night of silence
Forever haunts me
In every murmur of the night
I can only hope to hear your voice
But alas, it is only the wind chasing the leaves
In endless circles of desperation
I give up
Returning to this starless night
And my circular regrets
Where I belong
Lightening once lit up this barren sky
And now there is nothing
But the blackness of my own transgressions
That coat my heart in the deepest remorse
I hang my head in sorrow
Wishing my words could erased
Just as impulsively as they were said
Though wounds may heal
You and I will never forget the scar
And the pain my careless arrows have inflicted
For I have shot down the sun
And cursed my soul with eternal night
With only memories of times past
to keep me warm
My past mistakes clasp tight around my wrists
And remorse binds me here
I am a prisoner;
Of your pain and my foolishness
Of your silence, and my longing
I wait for daylight on my hands and knees
Knowing I'm not free
Till forgiven
Author notes
A contest entry
- Anything W/ Emotion by Violent Glass.
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Comments
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This is really good. Very deep, but full of pain as well. I loved the diction and metaphors you used. Thanks for sharing.
MxA
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This is the beauty of word I have missed. I am sorry for your pain. Forgiveness begins with self, don't forget this. We are all human and make mistakes.
Doesn't make things better it just is.
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I can only say that this is a beautiful poem of regret and pain. It's imagery is enchanting. The fanciful cast is what drew me in at first, but when you get down to the end it conveys something so essential - that we need to mind what we say. At some points, I almost thought that there should be another word here or there, but nothing major. It would affect the poem little other than augmenting the flow, which, overall, is unnecessary.
I must say that my favorite lines were:
"Though wounds may heal
You and I will never forget the scar
And the pain my careless arrows have inflicted"
There are many of us who need to think about these words and what they mean. I am just as guilty as everyeon around me for saying something before I speak and regretting as soon as it was out of my mouth. Thankfully, though, things haven't been that bad... Except for some things between me and my dad that we often times pretend never happened....
Anyways...
Thanks for the amazing read!
~Ayven
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