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Born Of The Storm

 

 

I.

hot, airless night
late August
heavy ... everything heavy
faint drumming faraway
storm promised
nature's release


II.

your touch electrifying

frightening the passion
thunder overhead
our cries of release
 ... lost ...

to the storm


III.

power lines down
too much rain
water and blood mingle
labour intensifies
bridge washed away
blue leatherette bed
first cry
 ... lost ...

on the wind


IV.

conceived in a storm
born in a storm
your journey traumatic-

may your life have peace
on this ...
the night of your birth


Happy Birthday Sweetheart
One today
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt is the picture ...
Image, credit unknown.

Song lyrics ...Live, the song is called Lightning Crashes.
The first line and picture were my inspiration.

'Lightning crashes, a new mother cries'

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  • JinSays gold member
    April 16

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    WOW, this is wonderful Sue.
    Do you ever had an off day? LOL, if you do you keep them to yourself. I love this take, and I love that you chose to tell the story of the baby. Nice touch, made it more personal, one I can definitely feel throughout.
    Love,
    jin


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 9

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    Beautifully done!

    Lovely and powerful words that tell a story
    I love the ending ...So touching

    Lynda


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 28

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    this is beautiful and powerful and with a touching twist at the end, it brings the poem to a perfect close. A loving poem. Well done Sue

    Emmy


  • hawkeslake gold member
    March 27

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    So beautiful, and such a great story! I love the lightening and storm as the backdrop for this story -- it just seems so perfect for your words and the flow of the vignettes. Lovely work, once again. Lita