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By the Sea


I met a woman today,

a rather large woman, with
a rather small voice...

who reminded me of

the shells we wear
and the truly timid
souls inside...


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  • white stone
    May 4
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    Nice illustration. Deep and true. Well worded.


  • oldschoolhero gold member
    April 11
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    amazing writing style


  • Emmjay
    April 8

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    I like this... a lot!
    There have been so many intense entries here, I have to admit, this was a pleasant change. This piece calmed my thinking process somewhat, not immediately though . I chewed it over, then came back to it, only to find that it is intense, but in a much softer way.
    I love the first three lines, a breezy statement of fact with subtle humour (got me smiling). It took me a while to go a little deeper with the shell concept, no fault of the writer- I swear, some days I'm slower than a tired worm. I got it eventually

    I don't know if it's the title but I really felt the ocean, crystal clear imagery, saw the woman, opened my shell just for a moment.
    Well written
    Thanks for entering, best wishes in the contest
    Sincerely -Emmjay


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    April 6

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    wow this poem is fantastic....subtle yet profound which is my favourite type of poem

    well done.


  • positive anarchy
    April 6

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    This intrigued right from the author preview page and I was correct in investigation... subtle yet startling...
    To me, the tones that resonated most deeply with me were of the sexual variety.
    As if, by connecting through passion, you lose a bit of yourself...and how we cover those decrepicies with the shells gained from past experiance

    the image of a larger, voluputous woman is very clear in my mind, vivid more in movement than color...perhaps it is due to my love of drawing sagging, curling curves, but she almosts represents to me life, thick with pockets...
    So violent in appeareance, yet so wavering inside...an oxymoron written so poetically.
    But how could it be drawn?
    ~Hippie


  • Ealdwyne
    April 5

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    Nicely done old friend. So simply stated with so many things to ponder.
    We are all shells after all, a body merely a costume we put on in this life to desguise our true forms for a time.


  • going nowhere
    March 27

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    OH.. i love this... it was like, at least to me, how people try to come off as bigger than life, but yet inside aren't. they are only hiding what they are afraid of being trampled on, their tender side.
    to me, GREAT write. one of my all time favorites, simply stating a very big thing.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    March 27

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    WOW!!! what a poetic thought.
    It is nice to see that some see beneath the surface. Nicely done.


    Delila

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