Desperation's to unanswered
vivid thoughts my mind implores
Distant whispers eat at me
I long for candy stores
Daydreaming in the shadows
returning every night
tainted dripping blood
are tears of placid cries
Now I embrace the silenced darkness
it takes the pain away
There's no light within the mouth of madness
the darkness I partake
A contest entry
- Prewrites Contest by tears.of.silence.
1000 points, ended April 18, 401 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I feel sentiments of lonliness in this but an acceptance of it just the same. I love the opening stanza and the balance of the whispers and simple pleasures. Very clever.
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aww this was a wonderful write. Great work indeed. You've made a 45 for this poem as well. I love the stories you tell becuase they are so real. I'm sorry for your hurt and night terrors. May you get better soon. You've made a 90 in points you've made the finalist list. Thanks for entering and best of luckto you. kahy
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Awesome
I really enjoyed this write, very creative and good luck to you in the contest.
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Love it...
Loving the darkness here, you wield it well...
Embrace thine inner darkness, for thy creativity doth dwelleth therein...
Another great piece...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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With some eagerness into the abyss
It would seem to me that these thoughts revisited daily have brought forth the desire to embrace the darkness and with some measure of eagerness fall into the deep abyss.
I like it, I like it so!
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Wonderful
Very creative and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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I like this one!
Its my kind of abstract dark. It speaks to me! -
I long for candy stores? lol. Nothing like a little light to make the darkness deeper. Nice. The first and second lines of the second stanza could use some reworking for the sake of rythym.
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