In the resting place nestled closely
to the Creator of all creation,
finding myself in the midst
of all beings from the past
and those still to come.
Jewels not yet discovered
worn by the Master of Magistries.
Jewels shinning brilliantly though
with softness calming the soul,
as we listened to the Master speak.
Without spectacle of how are you
or what have you done;
Just pleased to be there
surrounded by all who've come,
and reasoning was never explained.
While in this mode of classroom,
the attendance constantly changing;
With new arrivals always welcome,
and all receiving the same instruction.
Quietly enter and be seated.
The Master spoke in a manner
never spoken on Earth,
and was pleased
all had come when He called,
to those personally chosen.
The lessons were given
in the form of praise,
for listening and doing His Will,
and keeping His Law of Love
upon our hearts and our tongues.
After being dismissed from class
I found myself sitting at my desk,
with fingers upon the keypad.
Instantly tears welled within the eyes,
as cries of thank you, bellowed from inside.
A contest entry
- THE CAVE by Thoughts-of-Soloman.
2100 points, ended April 10, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments Greatly Appreciated
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a very pleasing read. I like how it is presented as a personal story. very uplifting. I always think of a Master as someone who has mastered something.
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So Uplifting
Hello,
This was such a beautiful and uplifting poem to read my dear friend. I am so glad I stopped by. It is a pleasure to read your poetry. You have a wonderful day and enjoy the beauty God has surrounded us with. Hugs and Smiles, Sandy 
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Nice
I thought it was well worded, a truly great mind makes these kinds of poems. The classroom is in Heaven, correct? I'm sorry if I mistook your poem I'm kinda slow right now. This poem reminds me a bit of Zahhar's poems, the best kinda poems that don't rhyme (I like rhymes). It also gives me that mystifying feeling kinda. Anyhoo, great story behind it. I'm off to read s'more!
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Ah, reminds me of Kahlil Gibran's book: "The Prophet";
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Instantly tears welled within the eyes,
as cries of thank you, bellowed from inside
This is so close to my heart. I know the pain that is felt when it is tears of thankfulness as well as sorrow for those lost. I suppose this poem will hold many different meanings for many different people, but for me it is the true meaning of christianity that moves me to tears.
Such a peaceful, and moving write. It brings tears to my eyes already. Thank you
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I read:
The 'One', among and revealed in the 'Many'.
A closeness to the Real and its witnesses beyond temporality.
Hidden knowledge, revealed through the Prophet,
awesome in effect, yet mercifully made gentle.
Having left one's 'small self' or 'ego' behind,
devotedly following their hearts before their reasoning.
An educating response to each who gave simple receptive ear.
From the Master who addressed uniquely for this moment
'clarifications/revellation' to all who were invited and attended.
All informing was praise,
for receptive servant-hood through love
to satisfy hearts and move tongues.
After this 'gathering',
back in my more familiar world of seeming practicality,
nothing but tears of gratitude.
What a response!
The poem read to me at first, as a narration to describe an event in very special circumstances, in the form of a story very appropriate to the prompt in symbolism and much to my delight.
THEN... the last stanza re-connected any prior ambiguity about this, straight back to what I completely believe to be, direct personal experience.
I believe this to be a sincere expression from the heart, which is exactly the highest aim which could have been hoped for in this contest.
Absolutely wonderful to read, you have captured something of the essence and meaning of 'Retreat'.
Sol
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Always! Always! My Brother and Friend! You always bring me kindness and consideration in your words of encouragement. I Thank You Most Graciously!
You are greatly appreciated and your thoughts and comments are always welcome.
In God's Love; Salaam;
Noah
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Difficult for me to appesiate such sentiments
I am not a believer in a higher theist God.
So the poem represents to me a fairy story in which case it has some merit.
all had come when He called,
to those personally chosen.
Does this mean that 17th century theologians were right in believing that only 1in 11000 man would obtain iternal life and 1 in 111000 women.
A good poem
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Perhaps the quest for eternal life is not in one's immortality, but rather in keeping one's innocence. I thank you greatly for your time and comments and invite you to read and comment if you would on this piece:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3811691
Thank you again for your time and comments. You are greatly appreciated.
In God's Love
Noah
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Though I can't claim to call myself a Christian, I still can appreciate your expression of your faith, and the wonderful extended metaphor/analogy of the heavenly classroom in your wonderful poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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when ever it's about almighty,
words always flow best
you did pretty wonderful
God, Heaven, Creatures, Nature
really good.
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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nice picture of God and Heaven and lovely metaphor of Heaven as classroom yay. I wanna be a teacher so thanks for writting it that way. It made me smile God is great Peace
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Insightful. A treat to read another poets perspective on something so important as this.
Overall a good piece,
Thank you for sharing this with me,
Kind regards
Sophie
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This was more difficult for me to read, in a way, because my faith differs. However, your imagery was en pointe and it actually flowed quite well...which made it a comprehensive and enjoyable read.
I appreciate your clear vision and purpose, it was evident throughout the piece what you are trying to convey and the devotion you hold within.
Thank you for sharing!
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Godly indeed
Love of the all mighty does come in many forms sometimes even in poetic verse with need of much discourse just the plain and simple form of personal devotion.
"The Master spoke in a manner
never spoken on Earth,
and was pleased
all had come when He called,
to those personally chosen."
How these lines bring me to my core belief that there is but one God that he be worshiped by us all in our very own and personal way.
I like it, I like it so!
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Ah, 'tis a fine write, indeed. You expressed your thoughts quite well. This poem also reminded me of a book by Kahlil Gibran, entitled: "Voice of the Master", Library of Congress Catalog Card Number
58-13333 Copyright 1958 by Anthony R Ferris.
Here's a link for the above title:
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wow this is a grate poem the whole thing is good...i realy like
" The Master spoke in a manner
never spoken on Earth,
and was pleased
all had come when He called,
to those personally chosen.
The lessons were given
in the form of praise,
for listening and doing His Will,
and keeping His Law o "
thos are my favorot lines...
i cant wait to read more of your poems!!!! =)
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Thanks for reading and commenting. You are greatly appreciated.
In God's Love
Noah
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Wow, this is massive! I loved it. Nicely written, great description... a very very heartwarming exposition i'd say. I do miss listening to someone like the speaker mentioned here. 'as cries of thank you, bellowed from inside'... It couldn't be said better than that. Thank u for sharing.
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. You are greatly appreciated.
In God's Love
Noah
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a good take on the prompt - spiritual smiles, the cave of one's mind pops to mind here, a daydream that teaches.
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Thank you for your time to read and comment. You are greatly appreciated. What's the purpose of a daydream if we don't heed its message? People across the globe have all sorts of visions, some bring them to fruition and some let them die, but if we let them die, the visions are only given to someone else. Not everyone gets the point when a message is delivered, therefore the message is only for those who get it. No one can be forced to understand. And somehow I believe you already knew that.
. Thank you again.
In God's Love
Noah
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. It reminds me of the writings of Kahlil Gibran, poet/philosopher. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing. For information about Kahlil Gibran, just click on this link:
http://search.yahoo.com/search?ei=utf-8&fr=slv8-msgr&p=kahlil%20gibran%20biography&type= -
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Thank you for your time and comment. The link is greatly appreciated also.
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i love it it seems flowing naturally!
good write! i liked its end and mostly "The Master spoke in a manner
never spoken on Earth
and was pleased
all had come when He called
to those personally chosen."
keep up!
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