Can you hear her sing in the all consuming night?
Each note piercing the sky
She waits for you to take her hand
To lead her to some other place of light.
Can you hear her cry when the night is burning with her pain?
There’s no escape for her to find
A smile has not yet found her lips
Come help her find a place where she is safe.
There’s nothing I can do to end the tears
I can’t still my fears
I want her to be safe, but there’s no way
Does she see what she’s doing?
The anger she’s lit in me?
She’s my friend but hell I hate the things she does
The way she’s breaking
Pulling my mind apart with each hand
Someone tell me does she understand?
I know that in our lives, we’ll do things we regret
Be with people that don’t care
I know she’s there, trapped inside
She doesn’t see that, I wish she could leave her fear, turn and forget
But she can’t, and I’ve got to understand
Keep tight hold of her hand.
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For my friend Lauren.
A contest entry
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Oh, I love it!
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in time, we find that true perseverance comes from watching the ones we love make horrendous mistakes.
But no venture of the mind or physical stature can truly comprehend the feelings of love and want. Temptation is but an optimistic motivation.
Forgive your friend Lauren for whatever you feel she has done to you, and she will reward you justly. Maybe not with your wants and needs, ut at least with respect for your words and compassion. You're at her mercy so it seems, do not unintentionally become her puppet. Remember we are all our own entities. just as she is who she is, you must be who you are.
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man this is really good and i can relate my freind is like that and i really dont think she gets it but all i can do is be there for her
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This is good, it's a very nice piece and obviously heartfelt - for your friend. Well done, it's never easy to write straight from the heart. However, it could be even more powerful - in my humble opinion - if the meter, stanza form, rhyme and line length were less variable throughout the piece. It lacks a coherent rhythm, which could have underpinned your concerns like a heartbeat.
Nice though.
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You've nicely expressed your feelings and concerns which you have for your friend.
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Beautiful
Whoever this is for, they are very lucky to have a friend like you. It is hard to remember sometimes that as much as we may want too, we cannot save another, we can only be there to support them through what they are going through and offer advice.
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