my eyes are brown
I can't believe you
who has known me forever
think they are blue
how many times
have you looked
at my eyes
as I kissed you
how many times
have you slept
with me and snuggled
real close
are you dense
or just cantankerous
like you sometimes get
when I'm dysfunctional
you always hated
my eyes of brown
I know yours
are indigo
you prejudiced
overstuffed
piece of furry
antiquated
teddy bear
Author notes
http://bamse84.deviantart.com/art/Dolls-Rome-110421221
Jake, I would like to be a sister!
Marie
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I really like this piece and the feeling thats in it. Its a very sweet write. I am sorry though, it is over the 15 line max.
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lol this is just too cute. I like it a lot. You've done an excellent job on this poem. You've put 5 poemsn into the contest. Your points will be divided. You've made a 17 on this poem. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy
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Great write lol i just had to ask my boyfriend what color my eyes were lol weird i know....
but yeah Great write
Thank you for entering good luck
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good job. nice images. good luck in the contest!
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Cute.
Very simple and yet, could be deep. Nice write. -
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I love the way you talked through this and until the end you think its a person and find out its a teddy bear. Great write!
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very nive keep it up....
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very nice i love it keep up the great work....
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I think this is precious
what a lovely poem you wrote,I see the sweetness in you, who wouldnt want you for a sis,
Blessings
Rend
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