We'll leave behind the city lights-
sleep out on the sand tonight,
and watch as stars,
and satellites
play anthems in the sky.
A brilliant setting to be in;
this harmony of tangled skin.
And I'm wondering,
where our bodies end
and the air really begins.
[chrous]
Starting to feel,
this moment could never be better.
and I believe,
that this is a day we'll remember.
The feeling of the sun implies-
we'll soon have to say goodbye.
But I'd rather sit,
feel your lips and
sink into your eyes.
It's filling up my heart today
with all the words I'll never say-
Because English is
a butchery
of romance anyway.
[chrous]
Author notes
Plain and simple: this is my favorite thing I've ever written.
You can hear the song at www.purevolume.com/polycentric
A contest entry
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I really like the first two stanza's you set the scene so well, the third held promise of things to come but you cut it too short. I'd love to see you write more. I feel there is so much you can add to this poem.
Cherry xxxx
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Thank you for the kind words, though it isn't a poem, it's a song and only part of a song.
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Giggles well that explains it then, lets have the rest
Cherry xxxx
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You could work on the rhyming scheme but it has a beautiful form and compelling words, especially the last lines-- good luck!
S. Sora Nirbas
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