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Dark angels

Dark angels flying by,
High above in the night sky,
We can only catch  a whisper,
A flash, a hint, a little blur,
But they do try,
They’re just denied,
Secretive ad closed are they,
So you can’t look on anyway,
Cursed to roam forevermore,
Just lock your gates and bar your door,
For death is all that they do bring bring,
To all the loving, living, breathing things,
Their happiness is so denied,
Between us and them a great divide,
We can’t understand and nor can they,
Their only choice is but to prey,
On us, the food of love and life,
We cannot blame them for their strife,
Love them, hate them, hear their cries,
For all they wish for is to die.

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  • SpeakLove93
    May 5

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    Very Nice

    This is a very nice piece. It has a very good flow to it. It is sort of a dark piece but it is nicely written. Very nicely done and thank you for entering!


  • Kathraina silver member
    April 15
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    Nicely written piece.
    Great flow and imagery here!
    Bravo!!!


    ♥ Kate


  • Justified Inc.
    April 2

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    OOOOOOOH!

    This was a very scarey write. I thought that you gave it kinda a little understatement at the end, which made it seem less scarey, lol. But I liked how you wrote this and the images were very real and clever. I enjoyed reading it and it kept my attention very well.

    Bravo!
    Justified Inc.


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 29

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    • if you would please space your name out in your AN like this : X x D r o w n . M e . D r y X x . Just out a space between each of your letters. Please. If you chose not to thats fine but i would like you you give me a reason.

  • xXx Dark Poet xXx
    March 27
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    this is really good. it makes since and flows. this is really cool. great job

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