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Meal

Quiet sun-bathed veld
Zebra grazing peacefully

The cheetah unfurls.

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  • Heroesrox
    March 31

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    Tee hee. That zebra is not gonna live much longer!!!

    Get 'em, Cheetah!!!!

    Thanks for sharing this. I like it very much. Awesome job.


  • Samplette gold member
    March 28

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    What I have learned about haiku, you leave out punctuation. However, I really like this. Thank you for entering.
    Sam


    • Stonecreek
      March 30
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      I do supopose that comma is unnecessary. I shall axe it.


      • Samplette gold member
        March 31
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        It isn't because of what I think...haiku are not written with punctuation as a norm...from what I have been taught. Keep the comma if you like...