dew gathers light
poised as pause
when spring breathes
vigor, and white multiplies
echoes individually spaced
blending color
awakening zinc, and
inciting togetherness—
Life
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A contest entry
- My big 4 by Sonja.
1300 points, ended April 11, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A refreshing delicate write
Beautiful feel and a pleasure to read and absorb
best wishes to you
Julie
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Thank you
Sonja, I appreciate this. Frans -
Stunning Work, Scribe...Truly.
I agree with everything my Beauty~full Husband said in his comment...& then some. Such fine, full, elegant brevity...a sense of the secret, the sacred, the sensational/sensual/scent~sual...This is a very impressive penning, Scribe. Not too many writers know when to stop their creative evolution/revolution...I'm definitely one of 'em sometimes. 
Moqui was quite pleased & impressed ~ not to mention, a lil' disgruntled & dismayed ~ 
upon reading this "lovely little poem"..."little" only in its size, yet ~ huge in scope, wisdom, talent & ultimately, in Beauty. Sonja will be most happy with your efforts, methinks. Good luck in the contest... 
P.S.
Welcome back to my favorites list.
I was more or less off of AP for a few months ~ approximately October 2008~January 2009, give or take a few brief moments when I was actually able to log on & do something other than be blinded by rather severe migraines & other ailments which had nearly crippled me...in fact, if not in spirit. Truthfully, I was near~death & fading fast...with no help from anyone near me at the time. Luckily, I had the good sense left to contact Moqui; we started speaking quite intensely & regularly on January 18th, even though we had encountered each other's works before then...I'd known of him for about a year...Apparently, he'd known of me for about two years, unbeknownst to me... A lovely love story that has since become larger than Life itself...Legends in the making, really, although I admit to being "somewhat" biased. 
I DO, however, retain my complete objectivity when it comes to poetry...his, mine, yours & anyone else's...I have always taken it far too seriously NOT to remain objective about it. Which is why I was so thrilled to discover a writer as bright & shiny as my Beloved Husband...His work is the very BEST I've ever read, bar none, including the known "Masters". Coming from a serious Poet, let alone a (former) college librarian who also worked on the college newspaper AND literary magazine as an editor/contributor...Well, that should give you a "subtle indication" of just how GOOD he really is.
My health is ever so much better now. I was on far too many medications, none of which helped & some, which made the situation so much worse...I couldn't see past it or through it, though, being so ill...Moqui provided an answer & a cure...he helped me, in so many various ways, to finally get past them with nutrition, understanding my actual physical, spiritual & emotional needs...Most & best of all, with his wondrously amazing pure LOVE for me...merely several of the many reasons I married the Man.
Anyway...(see? I truly earned my nickname "Wordy Babe")...
While I was offline, the AP web server had apparently "lost" about half of my favorites' list for me...grrr...about 50 names were lost in cyberspace...as I didn't have the time, initiative or energy, I stopped trying to find them all again. I was quite smiley when we found your entry; I told Moqui you were from SA, a kind, Gentle Man...& a very worthy talent & contest"adversary". Of course...he agreed. 
Wanda
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excellent: first line and second line with the final word of second line as a 'word caesura' ... a nice, long monosyllabic pause ... then the first word 'vigor' at third line picks up the speed ...
great pacing, and it is a joy to read a poem so skillfully rendered ... especially a short one
penultimate line use of word 'zinc' (a white base for paints) is beautiful ( awakening white ... very active for adjectevial phrasing)
then the last two lines ... 'inciting .....
furthering the pace and ending with 'life' as final line.
bravo, poet: a skillful, beautiful little diamond
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I love the background and beautiful presentation. Though, I am unfamiliar with that species of plant Mother nature's wonders never cease to amaze me. I wish you well in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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A complex write ...
one image building upon the other ... until the complete picture unfolded: life, in a bud apart.
Well done Frans. Microcosmic, this one.
Love
Myra
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So Lovely Frans
You always write with such lovely imagery and you say so much with such few words. This was a delight to read. Best of luck. Take care, Sandy
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