So fragile is the happy heart
a porcelain figure on the shelf.
Placed perfectly, not far apart,
so fragile is the happy heart.
The bull of love we beg depart,
before you break us all to hell.
So fragile is the happy heart
a porcelain figure on the shelf.
Author notes
I will place the quote here:
Happiness is the china shop;
Love is the bull.
---H. L. Mencken
Triolet
A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines
repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital
letters representing the repeated lines.
Make writing a Triolet more challenging! Make each line 8 syllables in length (4 metrical feet),
written in iambic tetrameter (the more common way), or try it in pentameter (English version)
where each line only has 10 syllables(5 metrical feet).
In a list
A contest entry
- A quickie quote contest by Tirrell.
750 points, ended March 26, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Really, give me your opinion!
Comments
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I like it, just not a winner.
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I like it, just not a winner.
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I love it! I love the first two lines especially, I think you really make your point. It was awesome to see a triolet for so well done. The topic and the form fit together well.
Good images.
Congratulations on your bronze!
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Love it!
Love the meter...Like the setting!
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well, i agree that love is the bull in the china shop, but love is a good thing sometimes :] its made me very happy before.
anyways, fantastic poem. i love the triolet structure
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I really enjoyed this poem. I like this structure a lot too.Congratulations, by the way.
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Wonderful write and congrats on the bronze!
You write a really beautiful poem using the prompt.
I love the lines regarding the bull breaking us all to hell.
As always written with skill by a talented poet!
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Congratulations on the bronze. This is beautifully written and you have a wonderful flow. Before you break us all to hell I loved it! It was a pleasure to read.
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EXCELLENT
This was great even with this restrictive form you were able to write a poem with meaning and a poem that touched me deeply. Yes love is bull or a bull or whatever thats why I am through with it, that way it can hurt me...keep the bull out the damn china shop is what I say!!!
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I really like it. I've always been a huge fan of this form, because they are quick and flow nicely. I liked the prompt you used, which I could see and made sense in the poem. You just need something else to rhyme with shelf, which I'm sure you already knew.
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very well done. congratulations on the bronze trophy that you have earned with this write. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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I love the way that u worded this piece this is excellent!!!!
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lol this one made me smile
nicely done.
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wonderful
I need to explore your different styles of poetry used what a great interpretation of the quote
porcelain figures on a shelf
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