It hurts at night sometimes I cry
because of all the pain
I wish for it and long for more;
but it has never came
Smiles, smirks, a simple laugh;
all a cover-up
Artificial happiness bought and feared,
which I drink from this cup
The ticks are heard, but way too slow
I want to set free
Let go of it all and fall asleep;
the last that's heard of me
If the curious ask why I'm gone;
an angel now above
Tell them that you took my heart;
and that I died for love
Author notes
I hope you enjoyed this poem. By the way 'Ticks' in the poem mean the sound some clocks make; ex. "tick-tock". Leave me your thoughts.
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be easy to learn how to play the Victim. I appreciate the emotion you express here & the pain is one easily identifiable by many. A couple of things need to be changed in the first stanza:
It hurts at night, sometimes I cry
because of all the pain
I wish for it and long for more;
but it never came
The comma is really needed because a pause is indicated in the line & you need to omit 'has' 'cause it's incorrect usage of grammar to put 'has came'. If you were to say 'has' it would be 'has come', different tense. You're longing for more that never came. I hope I made that clear. I've not tutored English in many years & have grown lax in my abilities to teach what I know.
Hope you enjoy your time here at AP & that you'll learn & grow in your poetic talent. 
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