I can't contain the spirit in my heart.
It's a spirit of enlightenment,
An enlightenment that I cannot even fathom or comprehend;
It's something I can only feel.
It's a spirit of truth, of justice,
But most of all;
It's the spirit of love.
The love with hath saved me from myself.
This love, ultimate love,
Love eternal, love divine,
Which leads me in times of darkness and fear,
In loneliness and abandonment,
Hath mercy on this dark and confused soul.
Love has given me another chance,
Even yet a million time o'er,
And my heart delighteth in this merriment.
Love has not forsaken me,
Though it has been forsook.
Love has been unfair to love me so long,
But in a way which I can appreciate,
Because I've finally found my way,
I've seen the light of love,
The light of God.
I've finally seen the light.
Darkness shan't reign o'er my soul again.
Heavenly Father;
I love you.
My Guard.
My Strength.
My Courage.
My Guide.
My Happiness.
My Bliss.
My Perfection.
My Everything.
My Love.
My Daddy...
My Lord, forevermore.
With You, everything's gonna be okay...
And that's all I really need.
Amen.
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Good.
I think that this poem is good already, but it's good that you plan to revise it. Line eight has a typo. Also, your use of "old words" is cool, just that it blends awkwardly with some of your "today lingo." I'd like to see you stick more to one style or the other, but either way the choice is yours as the poet. And either way, I already think it's a good start.
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Because I've finally found my way,
I've seen the light of love,
The light of God.
I've finally seen the light.
These lines are amazing..
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lon in darkness and fear I no what that is all about. Sounds like you have the perfect love the way this poem is so beautiful.
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Aw! Thank you! Not perfect, but certainly pure
But really, thank you for reading and commenting, I'm really glad you enjoyed it 
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This is truly beautiful!
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And I'm truly grateful you enjoyed it
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Oh, I thank my daddy for inspiring my sister in Christ to write a beautiful poem such as this.
well done.
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Thank you very much
That really does mean a lot.
I thank Him for allowing you to read it
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wonderful
kissjess
this beautiful tribute, this prayer of praise is a gift immeasureable to anyone who reads it. And as such, it glorifies God who spoke through you. there are imperfections in it - as there are in all of us. If you would really like help with refining its grammatics - we can work on it off site if you like. let know. thank you for sharing your heart. I look forward to reading more of your poems.
jingle
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Aww!
Thank you!
And I suppose God did speak through me, that way I can speak to other people, I guess that's kinda cool... never thought about it like that before.
I think I actually like the imperfections the way they are.
It's not refined yet, but as I grow up, I'll learn to refine future poems.
But for now, I'm just a 14 year old kid, and I make mistakes, and this'll remind me of that.
Thank you very much again
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This was very deep as you placed your all on the paper. Very simple and sincere. Moreover it was inspirational how your faith is clear. You reminded me of how God is perfection and faith is why we stay with him.
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Well I didn't want it complicated, I guess in a way it's apart of my testimony of Christ. Without faith I have no idea where I would be, and I know that I will never need to find out Thank you for reading!
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you did awesome!!! great write!
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Aw(: Thank you for reading
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Great job on this piece!!!
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Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it
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Good Work
I must say I am not big on religious piece sbut this is quite a powerful write and I grasped and understood the concept to this poem. your words ring true and I do like the message you are getting scross. anyways this is just a downright awesome poem all round and your background is quite lovly as well. your form to this poem is quite well done too and I like thebreak down to it. any ways a very nice write and keep up the good work.
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Thank you very much!
And the fact that religious pieces aren't your cup of tea and you like it anyway?
Even better
And I wanted to do stanzas but it just didn't work and I'm glad with the way the lines turned out.
Thank you once again
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Yay
I finally got through my writer's block.
Though it's restarted again;
Yaaaaay.
Anyway, thank you
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