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Broken

The London Esthique,
my London dream.
Now laughable, ridiculous,
stolen by you,
you who destroyed my life
on a way home from a job I hated.
Spinal fusions, blood transfusions.
Pain beyond words, pain beyond mention.
Oh, and oh, him lost, too.
A man thrust into a world
he could not handle.
I am damaged goods;
in my back, in my body, in my heart.
Doctors, lawyers, therapists, medicine;
all enough money to steal dreams,
dreams held so close for so long.
London's not calling anymore but mocking me
with all that was to be.
I am a broken woman.

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"A world without dreams."
User Name: Faerae

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  • AsIThink gold member
    April 4

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    This piece was sad; intense. The dark spoiled dreams that were sucked away in some moment in time...never to be realized. Wow. That made for powerfully real material (I hope that it is not personal; not that it would spoil the impact of this piece though). A fine write to me.

    AsIThink...


    • FaeRae gold member
      April 4
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      Unfortunately, it is a true story. But I am learning to be strong; the ultimate lesson, I suppose, other than kindness. It only takes one moment of stupidity on someone's part to ruina life or steal away dreams. I wish more drivers (it was an accident) would realize this. Thank you for reading; you are always so kind to me.
      Blessed Be,
      ***Rae


      • AsIThink gold member
        April 4
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        You're very welcomed...and thank you for the beautiful thoughts to me...

        AsIThink...


  • Glasyalabolas
    April 1

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    Very strong and precise piece, it paints an amazingly vivid picture and story for the reader. I love the structure of the piece too.

    Good write.


  • FaeRae gold member
    March 29
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    Thank you! My best friend told me that now that I've dug myself to China I should just take a flight home. Perhaps that's just what I'll do.
    Rae

  • sleepinglion
    March 29

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    A good story about a broken dream, but when you are on the bottom, things can only get better
    Lion


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    March 28

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    Wow, that was intense...

    Impressive work...
    I'm loving your freeverse...
    Deep, dark & full of the most staggering emotional depth as to leave me breathless in its wake...
    Keep up the good work & good luck in your contest...
    Well done!!!

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