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Graduation

Time at first comes slowly,
She drags her feet and stomps and stamps,
She’s such a petulant child!

Our first few years of schooling,
We can’t wait to grow up,
And because we cannot wait,
Time drags her feet some more.

Now the time is almost here,
The time to say goodbye,
To leave our friends and family,
To spread our wings and fly.

So time in her childish spite,
Has begun to pick up her feet,
That selfish girl picks up speed,
As she closes on our end.

She’s racing around that final bend,
As April morphs to May,
She reaches the finish line,
Just as I walk off that stage.

Author notes

This was a quick poem written on the spur of the moment. The words kind of just fell into place. We were talking, about twelve of us seniors about the life "after."

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  • daviscth silver member
    June 5

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    I enjoyed this very much! I remember my daughter graduating last year and experiencing some of these same feelings. Thanks so much for sharing.


  • Lyndon gold member
    May 2

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    Writing from the picture ~ good.

    I understand the immediacy of post-graduation let down and the recent memory of pushing time.
    Thank you for your effort and good luck.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • HereComesTheSun
    April 16

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    this made me look forward to graduation and i loved how this was written and how it really was so full of the metaphor of time, really made me smile
    great work and thanks for entering


  • tarcus
    April 7

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    I look forward to your graduation with time comes confidence which you lack at the moment.
    You have no need to be fearfull for the words you use are fine.
    Perhaps reading others works may help you to grow as a poet but I would suggest that you start by choosing poem "X" from poet"Y" and start with their oldest poem on this site to see how they started and then read their latest to see how if at all they have progressed and take heart from the fact that their first writes on here will be poetically inept when compared to todays works.
    (except mine which all suck)

  • Judith Chandler
    April 6
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    Time, up to her old tricks. Nice write, nice form.

    Congrats on your silver trophy.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 1
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    And because we cannot wait,
    Time drags her feet some more.

    isn't that the truth of any situation we are waiting for. you have written this well and i thank you for sharing this with me today. i wish you well in these contests that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • AngelsKissesJenna
    March 27

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    wow
    This brought tears
    to my eyes. I loved
    this poem. Great
    and brilliant write.
    Thanks for entering and good luck

    • snolan
      March 27
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      Once again THANK YOU for the replies. I've never shown my poetry publicly before; and every encouraging comment is appreciated. Thank-You!

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