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Leave A Candle Burning, My Love

I don't even bother saying anything
because I know it will never be enough
and keeping my spirits up isn't easy; the grief
doesn't matter to me anymore; it's worthless

Whatever you might say to me don't expect
me to stay, because nothing you could do would
hold me there; there aren't words that can make up
for my extended and maybe permanent absence

All that I ask is light a candle, let it burn day and night
as something to light my path back home if I return; my
heart maybe will be warmer, and I'd probably feel it

Seems that we keep ending up in the same exact place
again and again, with me turning for the door, heading back
out into the world, leaving you behind as the seasons continue
to change right before my eyes; the time passed by so quickly

I regret leaving you behind after a fight, knowing I might not come
back; you're my world, and all I believe in keeping and having
as my own to love and care for

Doesn't it feel like our streak of luck with fate has run out? It hasn't
even though the messages sent out are mixed up and confusion ensues
in our minds; when the truth and realization come to me finally, you'd
be the one to restart my heart yet again when I come back to you

Just leave that candle burning everyday and night that I am gone
for I might end up coming home again, and have that point of reason
lighting my pathway; I'd return a different person than the one who'd
left you like that; the hurt I caused you...I left it back in the darkness

Author notes

this was inspired by Light On by David Cook. I absolutely love his music, and this song always got me to thinking about alot of the things that I have in life.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CP5fBx8JLoQ

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  • Midnite-Rae
    July 18
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    "I don't even bother saying anything"
    i think if you took out the word "even" it would sound better.
    This was a sad poem, but it seems relatable.
    it flowed well.
    I've never heard that song so i can't comment about being inspired by it.
    You did a good job.
    I enjoyed reading it.
    Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.


  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 11
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    indeed a good write on the song as prompt, thank you for entering


  • rainbows. gold member
    July 6

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    Doesn't it feel like our streak of luck with fate has run out? It hasn't
    even though the messages sent out are mixed up and confusion ensues
    in our minds; when the truth and realization come to me finally, you'd
    be the one to restart my heart yet again when I come back to you


    I really like this. Thank-you very much for entering my contest.


  • Ami
    June 21

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    You can be my little sister
    And this was Amazing
    That song is Awesome and you did great with it
    Thanks for entering Good luck -♥Amy♥


  • pain is love.
    June 12

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    Wonderful poem. The flow was great. Them imagery was amazing I really liked the lines

    Seems that we keep ending up in the same exact place
    again and again, with me turning for the door, heading back
    out into the world, leaving you behind as the seasons continue
    to change right before my eyes; the time passed by so quickly

    They really reach my heart. Thank you for an amazing write.


  • Enrinye
    June 11

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    A beautiful poem, well written, very flowing, I just loved the image you used with candle: ''light a candle, let it burn day and night as something to light my path back home if I return''...
    the last stanza contents all the emotion and images of your poem: ''the hurt I caused you...I left it back in the darkness'' -wonderful...

    take care
    Suza


  • reckless abandon
    May 31
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    Great inspiration from the song, and great write overall, thanks for entering!


  • Progandother
    May 4

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    ...yet again another song I have not heard until this point because...I'm a shallow music snob...

    ...you've done a brilliant job in emulating the david cook song...and I can see within the context the use of a struggling relationship that keeps recurring (thus the continuous candle represents that the relationship just carries on again and again) and that anything that the candle obscures with it's light (the mistakes) no longer matters and people should just move on...

    ...the use of this metaphor carries the person reading your poem through this magisisical (not a word) journey...which I like in a poem...

    ...very well done and good luck in the contest...

    Oliver


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 6

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    I regret leaving you behind after a fight, knowing I might not come back;

    that is what i am going through right now so i could relate to this write from you. thank you for sharing it with me today and i wish you the best of luck in these contests that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • Reanna Eryn
    April 6
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    So very lovely. I love the concept.


  • Justified Inc.
    March 31

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    Love Untamed

    This strikes me as a deep love growing but still developing and unsure. I like how the candle kinda to me, represents the love in the heart that holds on and doesnt get extinguished. If it is still left burning then there is a light to come back too. I felt bad when I read this because it reminds me of a past love, abandoned yet not forgotten.
    Well written and from the point of view from the one wandering. Sad, but nessesary to find one's own path and place to land.
    Great read and thanks so much for entering it!

    Bravo!
    Justified Inc.


  • Dragonbabyx3
    March 30

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    beautiful! I loved the way you wrote this!
    the second to the last stanza was amazing, and that last stanza! wow! You did an excellent job here!

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