Its scary body floats at night
Through all the doors,it comes at once.
For all he comes and is a fright.Through all the scares,
the scariest is him.
When he comes at night,he eats my soul, because of
of all the mystery that was done.
Sometimes I'm sleeping and hear a sound,wonder if
it's him and is frightened as ever.
He tries to take,take and take.
I'm feeling scared of my enemies snares.
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Alrighty then. I am not for sure really what to say on this one. But anyways. Thanks for entering and bestofl uck to you in the contest.
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good for a 10 yr old i guess?????
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This is a very lovely dark write. I enjoyed it and I kept thinking of the movie and imagining and child in bed, trying to hide under the covers and constantly looking around for that grudge.
I don't know why your poem looks like that. My only guess is that you wanted to centre align it yourself and you failed. If you can't centre align then don't coz it's making your poem look weird. If this is the way you intended your poem to look like then never mind me.
The way you begin your poem is very nice, it instantly grabs me. You could have made it a bit longer by adding more horror but still, it's nice and I like it.
You have a repeated 'of' "because of of" and i would suggest that instead of "through all the scares" it would be "Among all the scares".
Keep on writing, thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
Nooni
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Nice!
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makes me think of someone. It was really good. I can relate with that. Check out my poems!
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Loved this poem, great job!!! best wishes in the contest!
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fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved it loved it loved it!!!
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thank you for this entry into my contest. the background kind of is messing with my eyes though. is there a way you can change it for me. i would so appreciate it. i wish you well in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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