Whimsy, whimpy little comments meant to
devastate existence are thrown,
bouncing off hardened harsh exteriors.
As your judgements and accusations
fall among the heap of vile infested,
rotting garbage of ill-tempered
tongues that leak unwanted opinions.
Yet your lips still spew the slobber covered
words at whomever you think has
belittled your pride.
Can't you see your comments warp the mask
over your face until it latches on,
tweaking and macerating your face with sweat.
Making you as ugly as your sly-fox
verbal attacks.
Lacerating your soul as you reject
those who loathe you for the judgement
of your so-called righteous endeavors.
Yet you forget these simple words:
"Judge less ye be judged."
Or in your case:
"Judge less ye be found deplorably hideous!"
Author notes
This is what I think of those who judge without cause or feel they can judge because they think they're better
A contest entry
- Do not judge me. by Serenity-words.
1800 points, ended April 19, 68 entries
Silver trophy winner
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How was this one??
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People are allowed to think they're better, not because they are, but because they don't know any better. To each his own life and to each his own troubles. Always because of the judgments we make. Even though we may think we don't judge, somewhere in our mind we think, if they did this instead of that, as soon as we stand in judgment we are judged and it doesn't matter how meaningless it may seem, we judge. I believe you have written a perfectly understandable message and I thank you. Is that statement a judgment call? Decide for yourself. Be well in life and the contest.
In God's Love
Noah
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What more can be said about your write that hasn't already been said by the other poets comments? I think just this hi. p.s. I'm amazed by your writing abilities. A great write as usual.
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Thanks
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Amazing
I loved the flow of words in this poem, and it really moved me, and it let me know what you think clearly of judgement.
Great job!
~Serenity
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Thanks for the read
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moving
deep and moving i like it.. i wish i had the vocabulary that you have to execute your thought so well -
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Well, you can get such a vocab by reading all the time... thats what I do.
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YES, AMEN!
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Can you tell I hate judgemental people???
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Yes, but hate is such a harsh word...I like to say, 'frustrated.'
Hate the sin not the sinner as it were.
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Dani, why don't you tell me how you "really" feel!! LOL All kidding aside, this was an excellent poem, full of very descriptive adjectives that really drove the point home...intense imagery! You have expressed sentiments felt by so many in the face of cruelty or harsh judgements, but who may be incapable of responding with your skill of crafting a rebuttal that succeeds in plunging into the soul and exposing the ugliness that resides there. Well done!! You might want to check a couple of typos though: "existance" should be "existence"; "loath" should be "loathe" - "loath" is an adjective, whereas, "loathe" is a verb, which is the right word for what you intended to say. I really loved this one, Dani :-).
Linda
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You are officially the best editor ever!!!!
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LOL...why thank you, Dani, though I don't think that it's true; there are many others here who would equally qualify, if not surpass me for that wonderful distinction :-). I am happy though that you are pleased with my editorial comments...all that matters is whether or not you find them useful. Thank you again, Dani, and if you have the time, please go read http://www.allpoetry/poem/38842 It's called Curse of the Red Pen, which I posted a number of years ago before disappearing from AP until recently. I dedicated it to one of my friends, Lurie, who was also an old-timer on AP whom I have not seen around since returning. If you read my comments, you'll understand why I wrote it...lol. Take care, Dani, and keep up the great work :-).
Linda
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very nice, i really liked the ending especially, bravo!
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Thank you.
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