blinking awake, bitter-
legs parted easy
as her lips, licked
& smeared.
room lit like Vegas,
headboard choked
with dying christmas lights-
flickering faintly.
mirrored ceilings
tell no lies.
Author notes
Name: Lindsay
Favourite Colour: Yellow
Favourite Number: Six
and a Random Word: Wrung
A contest entry
- Morning Quickie by Kari.
1200 points, ended March 26, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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I LOVE this poem. It's very, very good, and rather unique. I like it very much and I enjoyed your language choices. It's great. I loved your last line, made a real impact, good job!
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Alright you had 8 poems I'm sorry I didn't see this one. I will add 5 more wow points for this poem so you havea total of 95 points. You of course are still on the finalist list. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy
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5? Was there something wrong with this one?
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lol no.. I had to recalculate the figuring of 8 poems.. and I just don't really give a perfect 100 unless I'm so wowed by each poem that I can't help but go OMG that was unbelievable.
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oh, ok. gave me a heart attack there for a second, because most of my poems had at least around ten. lol
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Nicely wrote. Short, expressive & deep, when you look at it close. Thanks for great word choice. i
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Interesting, I like the take on this poem. So daredevill.
Good luck
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Beautiful imagery here.
No they do not tell lies, just lost dreams
and pain that nobody else will ever know. -
Oh wow I love the imagery in this one...you feel the pain, and see it all at the same time.
Great job. Thanks for your entry.
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