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Uncle Joe and Dad used to get drunk on Friday nights.

 

 

He really wasn’t our uncle, we just called him that because

he and dad used to sit at the kitchen table

every Friday night drinking

 

Pabst Blue Ribbon beer by the case

they smoked Pall Mall straights

played penny poker and listened to

country music.

 

Johnny Cash was their favorite and

I could tell when they were really drunk because

they’d sing a muddled rendition of

“A Boy Named Sue.”

 

Uncle Joe would declare to dad

in his gravelly voice, one eye squinted with

ever-present cigarette hanging from his lip

 

“Hell, if I owned a bar Mickey and Johnny walked in

his money wouldn’t be any damn good.”

 

Dad would quip, “Yeah, yeah, if you had a bar, Joe

you’d drink yourself out of business

now shut up and deal.”

 

The next morning, we always found them passed out

having a snoring contest, we kids used to say

 

dad on the couch, uncle Joe hunched over

the kitchen table, one muscular tattooed arm stretched out

the other dangling

 

as I helped mom quietly clear away beer cans

before we kids sat down for our morning bowl

of cornflakes, snickering.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Lovely

    althought i don,t know ur uncle joe but still i love this poem. good work.

  • but we do have an Uncle Joe and I still talk to him regularly along with Aunt violet

    ~Kelly


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      June 10
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      This was about 'Joe Underwood' sis, and we did used to call him, 'uncle Joe.'

  • This is so clevver, I REALLY LOVE YOUR WORK, I COULD PICTURE THE WOLE SCENE


  • malmadre gold member
    April 16

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    I feel inspired to write about my dad after reading this one, but if he was living or aware of it, he wouldn't like it because none of it is very nice. Another great write here.


  • truembrace
    April 5

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    such poems that are such a part of us as we grew up and really recognized life rather than the fairy tales we hoped for - seem to bring the most brilliant of imagery to the forefront. some stories have a great strength when we write them exactly how they remain in our minds until we share them like a gift to others. they are vivid and wonderful story telling - and often bring us to our own moments that we can only hope to capture in a way that is near as good as this.

    wonderful wonderful writing.

    Kim


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    March 29

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    I think we had the same dad, apart from a few details I think this is how my family spent friday nights as well. Thanks for the walk down my own memory lane.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    March 27

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    you have penned apart of your past

    here MJ, and I thoroughly enjoyed this, I felt like i was sitting at the table with your Uncle Joe and your pops playing poker having such a fantastically fun time.

    What a blessing to read,

    Love and blessings

    Rend


  • Nicolette gold member
    March 26

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    This one brings back memories of my dad and his cousin too - some very fond and funny memories. Was a joy to read yours, MJ!

    ~ Nicolette


  • tara wilson gold member
    March 26

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    i really like your poems like this one. your reminiscing poems. this brings back memories for me too... lol.

    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      March 26
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      Aww, thanks Tara.

      You know, I decided just the other day to start drawing on my early life memories for poetry ideas after reading some of Bukowski's work.

  • Conflicting

    I love the way this poem is written. The subtle sense of
    just a normal Friday night, leaves me feeling like.......Oh my! But, the way you have written it is as if incorporated into a childhood of innocence. What a contrast for this reader. I felt a sense of foreboding, while I was conflicted with the "snickering" and sense of respect and honor of a Father's Friday night poker game. Wow, so many emotions rose to the surface upon reading this write.
    I can't say that I didn't feel a lot of Irony through out the whole thing.
    Great job writing it MJ.


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      March 26
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      Thank you and a very keen observation as that is exactly what I was hoping to portray.


  • BearWoman gold member
    March 26

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    I like it! The scene was clearly evoked in my mind, like a short film. I especially liked these touches: "having a snoring contest, we kids used to say", "before we kids sat down for our morning bowl / of cornflakes, snickering."

    Since it is so prose-y, I would have liked a bit more punctuation; e.g., "Dad would quip, “Yeah, yeah, if you had a bar, Joe," and so forth.

    A nice piece to wake up to this morning!


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    March 26

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    Haha sounds like my 'uncle' john and my dad.
    I was 8, they'd deal me in, crack me open one beer while we listened to and sang alice cooper lol. good memory, liked the imagery.


  • motel silver member
    March 26

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    a well defined memory snapshot ... really pulls the reader in.
    seems we had a similar childhood.

    thanks.

    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      March 26
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      Oh yeah, did you have an uncle Joe Underwood who was a brick layin, hard drinkin, bar fightin son of a bitch too?

      Thanks for reading friend


  • klassy lassy
    March 26

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    The Johnny Cash vignette took me back, only it was to the angel voice of my aunt singing "Ring of Fire". Saturday night would find a house full of people who stayed late with their guitars, cigarettes, and wine. There would be deep-fried striped bass or lingcod, and salty snacks, too.

    I cleared the table many times of empty glasses and full ash trays next day. I didn't much like the mornings after, with blurry-eyed people draped all over the living room, ("Sunday Morning Comin' Down" ) but we always looked forward to the next weekend of music and the laughter of good friends.


  • BlancetNoir gold member
    March 26

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    Jeez, I love this! I feel like I'm right there in that kitchen, like a fly on the wall, this is so vivid, heartachingly funny, real and beautiful, I fell in love with these two guys singing Johnny Cash and drinking, yes, it has a Bukowski flavor, which I adore, but is marvelously unique, a feast for the five senses. You're in the zone...

  • Memories are funny things.
    I like the style of this piece. Very well done. Keep up the great job.

    -deadly


  • BellaD
    March 26

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    A somewhat different kind of poem for you (I think) but I like it. Seems like the start of an interesting short story or novel with the description and the snippets of dialogue. Very well done.

    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      March 26
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      Yeah, kinda 'prosey' I guess but I just bought a book of poems and stories by Charles Bukowski, who did stuff like this and it rather inspired me.

      Thanks hun.

      Love, mj.


  • Daizee silver member
    March 26
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    Good to see you back

    Love,
    S.

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