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Denial

An indefinable malady

clutches each breath.

 

Welts hiss in rapport

with collective echoes   

churning deep amidst

this abandoned emptiness.
 

A hollow substance
afraid to understand.

Saline rivers burn,

so damn them

I will...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • CrystalLizard
    July 10

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    "A hollow substance / afraid to understand"—this is a wonderful description, because denial is a complete lack of acceptance, total empty space, and yet it's so strong and clearly defined that it almost has to be a substance of some sort..... I love the empowerment at the end of the poem, that tears will be damned/dammed and denial overcome. Excellent job.


  • Knight70 silver member
    July 9

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    What a brilliant way to describe denial!

    I think anyone with a pulse can relate to this. Most of us have gone through denial at least once or twice. I know I can relate to this poem a lot, especially after my parents passed away three years apart. Like all of us who have experienced grief over any loss, denial is inevitable early on. Very well expressed in this "delightful" poem.

    Don


  • Nakatrea
    June 25

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    Sad but beautifully penned. Keep up the writing
    I'm very impressed

    Love quickie entries -- this is no exception

    Kat


  • Beret55 silver member
    June 19
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    Another good one. You hit the nail on the head.
    Verry good.


  • sinner-
    June 5
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    Intense

    Great poem of compelling depth, well written...


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 3

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    "saline rivers" that is quite creative...I like that...as well as the next line, the double entendre "damn." Yes, there comes a time when we have to stop caring, end the tears, dam them up, and damn them all that effect us.

    I think you needed a Moxie when you wrote this. It's just a soft drink that I sort of talk way too much about.

    You are a very good writer...well, I am not qualified to judge poetry so let me re-phrase that. "I THINK you are a very good writer."


  • penman gold member
    May 25
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    Excellent

    Another great write. So perfect for the image. thank you for sharing.


  • Juggalette Sammy
    April 22
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    You're a great writer and I loved this. Excellent imagery!


  • Swangrnv gold member
    April 1
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    wow

    intense, dark..deep, i love it..the imagery is great too..a very strong write..

  • Bob Fox
    March 26

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    Lady

    So powerfully tragic. Damn them but live. So that smile to the world and balance your heart on the equator of love.


  • Quiet places
    March 26
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    Excellent

    Depth of message so well worded gives emotion a new light. Well done. Don


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    March 25

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    amazingly worded. creative take on the prompt, indeed and out of the box as well. good luck in the contest.


  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    March 25
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    Oh wow! Great write! Good luck in the contest!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    March 25

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    This is scary good.

    MY EYES! MY EYES!

    You used some uber cool words here.


  • maralisa silver member
    March 25

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    a nice take on the image promt thank you for entering my contest and good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 25
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    Strong write, but then it is you... well written.

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