"The universe is a big place, but so are you."
'Today'.
I am;
We are;
They see, things
bursting, collapsing, splashes
of something, they see.
In me there is God
In you too
Yet we separate with such
depressing sped up fate, so much hate
I shiver rapt tremors & arrant spasms,
of traded love, smearing my ten
small fingers with thumb
across fogged up descried &
frozen windows, strangers,
shadows, pillows soft,
but not mine, also;
I even don't dance
I even have forgotten
The way we moved
around & around
When nothingness
was everything and
life was a chance
worth taking, and
still is.
You beat me 30 times
I wanted you to love me.
Too much, and then, I beat
myself 30,000 times from then
until now, out of sheer principle
I wanted it that much, and now
I know, 'that' love was
limited by fear & hokum.
I want the last thought I have
The final thing I think about
As I'm letting go of you
Whether I fly, or sink
It was worth the trip,
and love is unconditionally
to be continued...
(Environment permitting)
Mother, I forgive you,
now my dreams can get true,
and through to new.
If I want them to.
God is Everything
Thankfully infinite
patient & precise,
but I am
of you &
I am willing
to forgive even
myself.
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Written March 1st, 2004
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Sometimes you are amazingly insightful. The best part is that when you are being the most egocentric, you're still saying universal words that speak so well to so many. JustBe says you're a genius. I normally don't like geniuses, but in your case I'll make an exception.
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Great poem!
I love:
"When nothingness
was everything and
life was a chance
worth taking, and
still is"
Foregiveness is a Great Key.
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Thanks for sharing, a wonderful piece...........
sanity
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Horus8 is...a !
There is more to you than meets the eye...beyond the cover, the bitter pill, the Holy hope, the aching will, the lopside eye, the piercing gaze, morning stubble, coffee haze
There's more to you, than one could realize
much more than predictions summarize
and for some good reason I suspect
I feel for you ....good respect!!
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This is beautiful, and I hope you don't mind me saying that. I was going through the list of contest poems, and my eyes laid upon this one. I'm glad I read it, because I found every word of it to be touching. You have a wonderful gift, and your way with words is quite unique. Unforgiveness can be an aweful load. But when we allow ourselves to forgive not only those who've hurt us, but ourselves, the burden can be lifted...even more so when we put it in the hands of God. Horus I truly enjoyed reading this and I wish you the very best
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The greatest accomplishment for me in overcoming my demons was forgiveness. I also had to stop blaming my mother for allowing my molestation to occur. She was raised with secrets and so she learned early how to keep them. The hardest forgiveness was that of the person who molested me, in confronting him, I found that he had been molested as well. The link in the chain was broken with me, only because I found that I had to forgive. This poem touches my heart and brings tears to my eyes. CONGRTULATIONS on the silver!
Much Love,
Renee
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why can't you
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this is a wonderfull poem - because of your feelings and your ultimate forgiveness - wow - i so wish i could forgive..
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I am astounded by the honest raw feeling and fact you capture within the words of this poem. I'm so glad that you are a survivor. Your poem is excellent.
Absinthe
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Hi there,
This was an very amazing piece, a very interesting read. I liked the way you forgive at the end, as I know if you do not ever end up forgiving you end up eating yourself up inside. This was a heart touching poem.
Well done and thanks for sharing
All the best to you and yours
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This is sooooo kool! The way you put your words and the words you chose....totally magnificant!!!!!! I want to read it over and over again!
~Blackevil~
Check out some of my work and comment, even though my work probably isn't as good as yours, because yours it AWESOME! -
Been here ... and remembered.
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Oh boy, I wish I could forgive my mother, I saw her the other day and asked her why?, she denied all knowledge, in a way I feel sorry for her, she is going to be all alone in the end, and I'll have my family, this is such a heart wrenching tale and I admire you for the forgiveness at the end...........
Take care
sanity.
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You did a really awesome job with this...hmm, I've liked your poetry since you entered one of the contests I held....you're very creative an unique. You have your own style an that very admirable.
much love,
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Well.. I had just written a well thought comment for you, but due to the joys of technology, I was teleported from this page to another and everything I wrote is gone... And I'm too Busy (ok, and lazy) to put all that time back into it right now. Your pice has a lot to say (but of course you know this). It gets the mind working, and that is what poetry is for in my opinion. I also enjoyed the discussion that followed (even if it is from March). A lot of people on this site are pretty sensitive to even constructive criticisim, and so most avoid leaving any. Even I usualy don't, and I consider myself a fairly critical person most of the time.
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This is amazing horus... purely amazing... I've been abused so this has a special meaning for me... Bravo Horus.
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very deep. i had to read it twice, because i got confused i admit, but the second time around i understood. thanks for sharing a great write.
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Mmm. More than my little brain can handle. but enjoyable none the less.
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"When nothingness was everything and life was a chance worth taking", that sums it up for me. Where I've been of late is, I guess universal, and yes it's big, with small infectious bites of reality. The biggest feat is to forgive ones self. Very well written, I love the "softer Horus8" Although HORUS in Greek Mythology never really showed a soft side, or did he? Thanks for sharing.
Renee
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yah yah
yours...
Nyx... -
I mean for Christ sake my last names Handrinos?
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Yeah, I know about Paghat's garden.
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mhmm...go look what Anath means
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Nyx Anath huh, you're cute, like a popping button.
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It's a great poem, your use of words is unbelieveable, and the message is quite clear. I enjoy all of your stuff... Keep it up (not as if you WOULDN'T if I didn't tell you to..) hah. See ya
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Hey, you've brought me to tears again. This is really beautiful (and painful). It reveals your soul in all its striving... the seed to some incredible, strong, exotic plant that's been dropped in the street somewhere, and has taken root despite the odds against it.
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And for the record, the day you like my writing? Will be the day I stop writing, because personaly your crowd of writers and peers are everything I as a human being stand against. You always settle for what's easiest and less work, what's expected, and that's no way to write. I call it like I see it. "green glass" lol. you know 80 % of the poems in that contest used the term 'green glass'? But you did it the best, you said "green glass" with a special subtextual substance the rest were lacking, and in no way was that contest going to let the 'green glassers' not win, I knew that from the gate. so I just wanted to congratulate those of you that used that awkward yet expected given, of siting that 'in fact 'the glass was indeed green, but see the universe is big, because well, the words GIGANTIC and HUMONGOUS were out on rent to the asshats down the block that are rewriting the book of Latter day saints. I do apologize, now if you will, the exit sign is blinking and that away, you're excused, don't let your ass break my door.
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ah. and i see it as moving beautifully. and perhaps i was wrong as well. but you are the master of poem voodoo. and i'm always there to stick pins in.
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Thanks Leanne! Try not to play with your tits on the way out! Asshat.
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great poem!!...loved how you noticed that the universe is big!...hugs...leanne xxx
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Wow, this was amazing. Very sad tho. I felt you hurting, crying in this piece. Maybe I am wrong, but that is how I felt.
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This poem doesn't cross my mind as having anything to do with faith, not to me anyway, but how it works to you -- is all that matters. Whether I have faith in the universe or not, it moves the same with me there or not.
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that's a strong faith you have there, and you express it beautifully. I'm sure you haven't read my poem, What faith?, but my faith is slowly slipping away from me. Reading stuff like this is such a positive enforcement for me. Keep writing, i'll be reading. thanks
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i feel, so small, and lost reading this. like a child stuck in the forest alone.
as much as i see a tone of victory at the end of this, i still feel sad, that you should have to forgive yourself in the first place.
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wow not like your other pieces, I am suprised but then again you are always coming up something good to read, Jeremi you got the gift? Never the less you are an excellent writer and I am not just saying that you are up there and I hope your days is great you deserve it. Anyways I am on a break bye
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This started out abstract to me, in form and verse only not speech. Then it woven itself into a story that was emotional and explicit in that course.
A good piece that you have written here.
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