Twisting limbs lament ages
Past reaching, past growing
Rooted in the depths of time
Structures with divine hearts
Lean in the soft soil
Oh pillar, my crippled staff
How large I have become
Looking down, crouching
In the crook of your neck
I will fall with the mighty
Running down the length
Of your walking stick
Uprooting the base of my life
There your hand will cover
The unshaken part of me
That crouched there then
Yet stands here now
Author notes
Picture is The_Dark_Tree_by_X_Horizon
Deviant Art
A contest entry
- Quickie!! Quickie!! Quickie!! by T.o.r.t.u.r.e..
525 points, ended March 25, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This MEANS SOMETHING when you have Parkinson's and walk with a cane.
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There your hand will cover
The unshaken part of me
That crouched there then
Yet stands here now
this poem is music to the ears
the gold I feel here from the words
you painted a stunning picture
so well done
Hugs Angel♥
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Holy Moly Macaroni!!!
this was flippin awesome. i love every line of it. and the picture (scary) yet awesome i love how this poem flows flawlessesly its just insane gorgeousness you are an awesome poet aunt
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Just excellent lass...
Has a tangible feel to it...if that is possible...
The photo not needed though beautiful....
your words instantly painted a picture....
the progression was like music...
the poem eased upon the end and it was then i thought.....
.....stunning................literally my first reaction.
The third stanza is just filled with magic....
i thought of my old braided shalaly.....
My humble opinion is this should be gold...
and you should be proud of this.....
Bless you gypsy,
Lowell Poe
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Thanks Lowell!
So glad you stopped by to read this, I so appreciate the comment! I think I am doubly grateful beings this is one of those quicky contests that you have like 30 minutes to write. I hate those kind!
So..........thanks so much.
Be well and blessed!
Annette
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a good poem, crouching in the crook of your neck, a great line is that - the whole poem had an air of wonder to it.
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Annette
If anyone ever put a pic with a poem -you just did.
I love & I mean love this :
~Lean in the soft soil
Oh pillar, my crippled staff
How large I have become
Looking down, crouching
In the crook of your neck~
Very nice. really.
Now don't go getting the big head, cause you need to write some more.
Joe
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Keep Right! (lol)
Joe, your screen pics just crack me up!
Thank you so much for the lovely comment, I promise I wont get
a big head! only a big grin!
Go ahead now and put one up yourself will ya, cause I want to read
it!
Miss ya and
ya!
Annette
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Very NIce!
As usual, you knock it out of the park, as well. Congratualions on the win also. I could only hope to write poetry as deep and spiritual as this. It is the Divine that lifts us as we begin to sag under the weight of our own imperfections. Well written and felt.
Jeff
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Poetrynovice:
Thanks so much Jeff! Glad you liked this one.
Hope all is well and inspiration is hounding you relentlessly!
Take care and be well!
Annette
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Wow, this is powerful, really nicely written with very effective diction.
mj.
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MJ~
Thank you!
Take care and give yourself a big smack on the back
for all the great work I've been reading from ya! (that's my way of affection)
Annette
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I like yours a lot better than mine.
Although the first stanza of mine was written in English class and the second was written during my favorite show because Ashley wanted to judge the contest.
She really likes the word lament... I like that word too. -
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Lol Chase!
we both used her favorite word, thats weird huh?
It would be hard to finish a poem while your favorite show is on! lol.
Ashley pressured you!
But it turned out so well!
I hate quickies! The only reason I entered this was for Ashley, I have never entered one before!
Annette
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I mean congrats!!!
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Thanks Blue30!
I thought ograts was just text slang...lol, thats how silly I am!
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Wonderful imagry. A great write. ograts to you.
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He's probably right!
You can't say I didn't try! Oh those dang quickies!!!
Love ya Ashley!
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you used my favorite word!
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I love it!!! its full of imagery..my like imagery. and Mina just wants to make fun of it.. dun feel bad.. he has done that to EVERYONE who entered lol
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